by mcZu » Aug 16th, '10, 06:15
Nice, not bad. You structured your verse pretty well, had a good rhyme scheme, some dope multies and managed to convey the overall ''I'm better than you'' message. Try to write about something else besides bragging, a brag verse once in a while is good to train your lyrical skills, but writing heartfelt, deep, poetic, real verses is where it's at. Keep writing, you have talent. It's a good verse.
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