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Geno & Alieus - The Light

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Re: Geno & Alieus - The Light

Postby BigBoss » Jun 7th, '11, 06:14

I REALLY like that fuckin chorus. And the last verse by menzo. Holy shitcock.
And the story telling part when he tried to rape the teen and police came :laughing: :y:

Ayyy go do mine? I (finally) finished the whole damn song now. :y:
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Re: Geno & Alieus - The Light

Postby Master Chief » Jun 7th, '11, 06:27

Rhyming was a lot for prominent in this piece. Holy shit at the amount of multis. I will say though that I had a hard time following the concept/theme but there probably wasn't any to begin with. The hook is really good though. You wouldn't expect a hook to have so many multis yet still sound like a hook.

Good shit. But, I find it funny that I wrote something that ties in exactly with the police/rape part that Menzo wrote about. I enjoyed that bit too :y:

Keep 'em coming. 'Bout to send you n.iggas a beat tomorrow :smoking:
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Re: Geno & Alieus - The Light

Postby Master Chief » Jun 7th, '11, 06:34

Btw, do you guys mind if the beat has been used by another artist or does it have to be original?
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Re: Geno & Alieus - The Light

Postby 12characters » Jun 7th, '11, 07:20

SWEET_TOOTH wrote:Holy shitcock.

This explains it rather well :laughing:

I liked how wicked you guys were and the darkness of the theme. I thought you guys had some really sick lines (even in the chorus).

The flow was on really point too. I'm not that experienced or knowledgeable with multies, but I was really impressed.

My favorite lines were;

Geno wrote:And if I die today doc, burn me with graves to match it
Fresh out the fireplace hot, and then inhale the ashes

:rock:

Alieus wrote:My birth mum's cervix was purged when
a surgeon had discouraged my resurgance
I turned him and murmured..

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Re: Geno & Alieus - The Light

Postby Xray » Jun 7th, '11, 13:17

That was dope. I had no idea Menzo rapped or was Alieus for that matter. The whole time I thought it was Geno haha. As a collaboration it was excellent with the double hook, two verses each. I mean two solid verses each. Both of you had great flow and well executed multies. Pretty much what everyone else said, solid drop. Are you guys a duo? cause the chemistry between you guys seems great. Def checking out more of your work, both of you. Good rhyming. :b:
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Re: Geno & Alieus - The Light

Postby SajN » Jun 7th, '11, 13:27

Looks dope. The style/lyrics aren't my cup of tea, but it sounds nice. The multies and the general rhyming is pretty nice, the flow is solid.

I've read this piece many times before, but it's now I actually got around to feed it, lol, sorry.
Tbh, I don't understand all of it, or nearly all, lol..

But yeah, really like the rhymings in this one :y:
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