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Re: Ego's Rapture

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 3rd, '12, 18:38

First off, the flow :worship: Yeah, got it first try with no hitches at all, incredibly smooth. The rhymes are ridiculous. Alieus' first two lines are crazy with the rhymes, that part stuck out with me the most. And your second verse haha, crazy imagery man. However, on this piece, I think I was feeling Geno a bit more. The first two lines he wrote set the tone and flow perfectly, it's like you couldn't read it and make it not flow. The rhymes were crazy, this reminds me a lot of a piece you guys linked me to a while ago from when you had first started rapping in the sense that that particular piece was just all out rhyming.

Happy Birthday to Ego, nice drop in celebration. :y:
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Re: Ego's Rapture

Postby Eedee » Jun 3rd, '12, 22:24

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Intercept our visions and trip us, so expect some vigor
Text your next-to-kin-der surprise! An artifice with a mission


For some reason I really liked this rhyme.

Anyways, this was classic Ego. Loved it. The flow came really easy for me over such a great beat - no complaints there.
Vocabulary was incredibly sophisticated as well, refreshing to see. :y:

I think Geno took it as far as imagery and painting that verbal picture in your mind, albeit Menzo killed it at well. It's not really a competition so I feel bad for saying Geno did better because you both went ape-shit here.

Another great drop. Good stuff.
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Re: Ego's Rapture

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 5th, '12, 01:24

WOW! This was awesome! My favorite was the last verse very nice rhyming and great imagery, Both came out hard you two are really great writers. This shold definitely be recorded! I really like how you guys did the structure. Some Great metaphors in there too man. I liked this alot! keep it up guys!! Let's get some moree
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