Chimney Keystyle

by **mcZu** » Feb 24th, '10, 22:44

Product of boredom, don't take this serious.

Coal on wax? Is he trying to imitate a candle show?
Kicking him off the Island, that’s what the members chose
Threw him in the air, that’s the only time ember rose
The way I ball is hot, call my style Amber Rose
And the hoes aren’t on your lap like some ripped jeans
Can’t earn a hot dollar, not even a hot cent even if he ate lit beans
This kid mean, he a James clone, why not just be you?
His fam be like the Na’vi people if I ask where you at.. ICU
Why beat dude? ‘cause he couldn’t beat me with the lotion
The man said it himself, he’s lacking the devotion
Leaving me to be attacking him in a motion.. Zu be rude
I’ll leave his body parts messed up looking like an unsolved rubix cube
It's the truth..

I still have love for you, pause.

by **Cam Aura** » Feb 24th, '10, 22:56

dope shit hahaha

i know its just for fun but some nice wordplay in there

dont get the title though :whistle:

by **Doctor Skittlez** » Feb 24th, '10, 22:58

This Alright, Fam. I Got The Feelin' It Shoulda Been Longer, But That's Just Me. Flow Was Off In Certain Places, But Not Enough To Be Overly Noticeable. Multies Was Cool. Not Much Else I Can Say, Though. Seemed Straightforward Enough, But Lacked Some Pieces. But Keep Doin' Ya Thing.

by **mcZu** » Feb 24th, '10, 23:01

Cam Aura wrote:dope shit hahaha

i know its just for fun but some nice wordplay in there

dont get the title though

Thanks, the whole thing is a sublime, lol. That's why, the one who it's directed knows who he is.

Doctor Skittlez wrote:This Alright, Fam. I Got The Feelin' It Shoulda Been Longer, But That's Just Me. Flow Was Off In Certain Places, But Not Enough To Be Overly Noticeable. Multies Was Cool. Not Much Else I Can Say, Though. Seemed Straightforward Enough, But Lacked Some Pieces. But Keep Doin' Ya Thing.

Flow isn't off, since I always write to beat. And since you don't know what beat I used, you cannot possible know if my flow is off or not. And about the lenght, well it's a keystyle. I wrote it in under 2 minutes.

But thanks for checking.

by **Doctor Skittlez** » Feb 24th, '10, 23:12

Man, I Know What A Keystyle Is... N' You Popped This Shit Off In Two Minutes? I Could Finish Up Somin' Like This In Thirty Seconds... N' Bout The Flow? It Was How You Used Ya Multies. I Ain't Sayin' It Don't Work To A Beat, But Some Of The Multies Didn't Match Up, Which, IMO, Contributed To A Li'l Off Flow... But Like I Said, It Ain't Overly Noticeable. Keep Up, Fam.

by **mcZu** » Feb 24th, '10, 23:27

^Thirty seconds? Don't make me laugh man, in 30 seconds with wordplay like this in it? And easy on the caps tiger.

I would say prove it.

by **Doctor Skittlez** » Feb 24th, '10, 23:31

Man, Go Peep RapDogs N' Get Back To Me On Wordplay... Yo' Other Piece Wit' The Fifteen Lines Had Some Serious Dope Wordplay, But This Was Elementary Like Watson.

by **Cam Aura** » Feb 25th, '10, 00:36

^ you come in here with a dumb ass name like that smack talking mcZu :laughing:

i peeped ya piece bro... not much

by **Doctor Skittlez** » Feb 25th, '10, 03:21

Yo, I Didn't Say Me, I Said Rapdogs... Fuck, Most Of The Newbs Have Mo' Complex Wordplay Than Was Displayed In This Piece. But I Ain't Tryna Hate. I Gave Dude Some Constructive Criticism N' He Balked. Everybody Givin' Props On This Site, But Few People Actually Constructively Criticisin', Unless The Spitter Is New To This Site. But Ya'll Got Some Nice Rhymes, I'm Likin' Most Of What I See. Besides, This Piece Wasn't All That Bad, In Fact I Liked Most Of This. Just A Small Critique Of The Flow.