The TRshady Forum became read-only in December 2014. The 10 year history will live on, in this archive.
Continue the discussion with the new home for the Eminem and Hip Hop discussion: HipHopShelter.com.

Fa-Q - Got Me Losin' It

Want to share a poem, story or a moving article? Share creative literature text here.

Fa-Q - Got Me Losin' It

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 23rd, '10, 18:20

Another one of my love songs lol...the parentheses aren't me its the hook and bridge in the beat...enjoy

This is my first day I'm having without you, am I taking it well,
Do I look as confident as an angel, I think your mistaking it with hell,
Your hips and thighs, do you know they've got me hypnotized,
Your lips and eyes, you have know they've got me so hypnotized,
I see you with him everyday, for some reason my desire builds,
My still cold heart, cold shoulder, and cold blood has fire drills,
You forced me to have all of the above, but I can't deny yer' chills,
You have flawless features, like your soft, rosy cheek bones,
She forces out, each night without her, tears and meek moans,
Out of my cursing mouth, hate and love both leak groans,
I dream we act just like kids again, we could swing on a swing set,
I'm an angel flying you to heaven, let's see how big my wings get,
I feel so alone inside, I know it looks like I've grown in pride,
My tear filled eyes, I try to conceal, their shown then hide,
I tried to remember your eyes, and their shade of blue,
I wrote a thousand bars, screaming this is what you made me do,

(Baby when you try and walk from away,
You don't understand what you take from me,
When you leave me all alone, and my body's so cold, (Oh girl)
You can find nothing to say to me,
Your blind to the love you use to see,
Got me waiting by the phone, please come home,
I need you back,)

See, I know it looks just like I have little or no emotion,
I feel like, my rolling tears, drip in the middle of the ocean,
I look at you, seeing your blue eyes, and blonde hair,
Knowing that you and the morning's dawn share,
The same shade, your lips are like a red rose,
Each of mine shiver, and only the the dead knows,
How they truely feel, you see what being honest brings,
If I get to be with you, I'll even wear one of those promise rings,
Songs about you, are the only thing that fills my notebooks,
I had nothing but verses and poems, and never wrote hooks,
A raincloud over my head, nothing but thunder storms,
Your radience unmatched, like the sun, no wonder it warms,
Her warm smile makes me blush to the point of no return,
And the candle that was my passion, doesn't slowly burn,
I have so many things I have to say, stacked on my shoulders,
Its stored, ready for when I will say it, in the back of my molars,

(Baby when you try and walk from away,
You don't understand what you take from me,
When you leave me all alone, and my body's so cold, (Oh Girl)
You can find nothing to say to me,
Your blind to the love you use to see,
Got me waiting by the phone, please come home,
I need you back,)

Tell me, the best you can, how I can make your toes curl,
Even though, I know you know my heart knows girl,
Would you tell me, please how to earn your heart,
I'll sing you a duet, then try my best to learn your part,
Do I send you a carnation, because my heart's breakin,
Do I plan a funeral, cause the say you told me we're through,
I died inside, because out came the old me and fear grew,
I tried to hide, I tried to man up, made my eyes wide and dried,

(Baby when you try and walk from away,
You don't understand what you take away from me,
When you leave me all alone, and my body's so cold, (Oh girl)
You can find nothing to say to me,
Your blind to the love you use to see,
Got me waiting by the phone, please come home,
I need you back,)

(Outro)
Can a song I scribble, earn them back, can a poem call your eyes, (I need you back)
And tell them, whatever I did, I'm sorry and show them I apologize, (I need you back)

(Girl I need you in my life, and I promise to do right by you)

(I need you back, I need you back,
Girl I need you in my life, and I promise to do right by you,)
User avatar
Fa-Q
Pill Popper
Pill Popper
 
Posts: 8404
Joined: Dec 20th, '08, 21:15

Re: Fa-Q - Got Me Losin' It

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 23rd, '10, 23:45

Bump
User avatar
Fa-Q
Pill Popper
Pill Popper
 
Posts: 8404
Joined: Dec 20th, '08, 21:15

Re: Fa-Q - Got Me Losin' It

Postby classthe_king » Mar 24th, '10, 03:05

I'm busy as fuck but I will feed it tommorow :y:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
User avatar
classthe_king
Addict
Addict
 
Posts: 14163
Joined: Feb 12th, '09, 02:30
Location: Ohio
Gender: Male

Re: Fa-Q - Got Me Losin' It

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 24th, '10, 19:53

Haha ok Class
User avatar
Fa-Q
Pill Popper
Pill Popper
 
Posts: 8404
Joined: Dec 20th, '08, 21:15

Re: Fa-Q - Got Me Losin' It

Postby classthe_king » Mar 25th, '10, 00:46

This is pretty good. Not your best piece but dope none the less. Your flow is getting alot better.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
User avatar
classthe_king
Addict
Addict
 
Posts: 14163
Joined: Feb 12th, '09, 02:30
Location: Ohio
Gender: Male

Re: Fa-Q - Got Me Losin' It

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 25th, '10, 20:21

Thanks class
User avatar
Fa-Q
Pill Popper
Pill Popper
 
Posts: 8404
Joined: Dec 20th, '08, 21:15


Return to Creative Writing



Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users

cron