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Ry`u - small drop (looking Feedback)

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Ry`u - small drop (looking Feedback)

Postby ry`u » Mar 25th, '10, 16:03

Hey...

growing up paralysed/ In a state of surprise/
I was seldom seen/ in that realm of hate/
but when I’d create/
yall debate my mind state/
and label me a monster/ fucking crazed youngster
you just don’t know, do you? do you realise/
the real desolation/ and struggle, I’ve survived?/
ry`u
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Re: Ry`u - small drop (looking Feedback)

Postby gutawafang » Mar 26th, '10, 08:47

Ok, quite good man. :y:
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Re: Ry`u - small drop (looking Feedback)

Postby Yah-hah » Mar 26th, '10, 15:24

Yeah man was a really small drop but got some potentila man. Wanna see more from ya though homie :y:
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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