Playing Around (Shake The Rust Off)

[Solace]

[Hook]
Awe and woah, Solace goes further with the flawless flows,
Cocky? Please, it's true when I say nobody's stopping me,
Take an army down at once just like playing with Dominos,
And I will take all players money like playing Monopoly.

[Verse]
So I'm a crazed satanic matter who makes great panic after,
I slay and ravage rappers then take stained manic laughter,
And all day it's mad and sadder the way I have to chatter,
To wait for battered raptures, then taste the havoc shatter,
It's waste, I'm back to splatter your face, now back to scatter,
Ya days, then grab the ladder and break ya back, I'm madder,
Today, to make you mad hurt in ways so every rapper's,
Amazed, put you wrappers in place, in this game the batter,
Is shamed, when I happen to aim my rap ball back, smack-hurt,
The game, in this battle I rattle, y'all was cattle like the pasture,
Is grazed, y'all skill-slackers is lame, just turn ya back like you're,
Gay, take your spine, erase your mind, all that matters,
Is pain, I'd hate to slander your name, nah I'm lying that's a matter,
Of change, ahead of my time, life was spent backwards per say.

[Hook]
Awe and woah, Solace goes further with the flawless flows,
Cocky? Please, it's true when I say nobody's stopping me,
Take an army down at once just like playing with Dominos,
And I will take all players money like playing Monopoly.

[Solace]

Bump.

[Solace]

Thanks bro, appreciate it. Will try hitting hard next time. Pause.

I'm just a bad writer in general but hopefully I'll improve. Also, bump. Would like some feed on this, it was pure multi/flow practice.

[mcZu]

Omar, bro, you're focusing to much on multies and rhyme schemes and are totally neglecting the essence of writing; expressing yourself. Even with a brag piece, such as this, you should have a plot in mind or a specific storyline, and based on that you should write your verse. By doing that you'll find yourself improving in no time, and writing will become natural to you. You'll learn how to write a real verse, from start to finish.

You have all the tools needed, you mastered the art of rhyming, now you need to master the art of writing.

That said, it wasn't that bad of a verse, chorus sucked imo. Keep writing, man, keep writing. And you're not a bad writer in general. You're one of the best writers on this site, stop demotivating yourself and get back on that saddle, pause.