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Cider and Black

Postby RealSickLindley » Apr 22nd, '10, 04:55

True shit, less of the punchlines and metaphors..


He went so far away, throat filling with lumps,
To an aray of hills, as the car went over the humps,
He was stumped, did he want to go on this day?
He was pumped, but didn't have a choice anyway,
Remembered yesterday, sayin' goodbye to a friend,
And on the way, he realised that it all had to end,
He went and penned, everything he could portray,
Truth was hard to send, about where she would lay,
Full of dismay, how could he pick her perfect suitor?
Emotions in the way, not really thinkin' of her future,
He could almost shoot her, would it make him ok?
He wants to mute her, and work out what to say,
Dreamin' everyday, but reality didn't ever start,
He'd just say "Hey, she might be in the dark",
Stare where i may, cos it's a placebo for heart,
I couldn't stay, so our lips were prised apart..

So if you were smart..
You'd know I Miss You..
My Top 5 (in no order)-

Eminem
Big l
Biggie Smalls
Royce Da 5'9"
Jigga

'If you do it, it's only to a degree, i am the AIDS.. No one wants to do it with me..'
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Re: Cider and Black

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Apr 22nd, '10, 07:28

Very touching piece.
I like the metaphor of a placebo for love, as well as the imagery of a passionate kiss being forcefully disrupted by an invasive force.
Do to others whatever you would like them to do to you. This is the essence of all that is taught in the law and the prophets.
-Matthew 7:12

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