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Airplanes

Postby RealSickLindley » Apr 22nd, '10, 04:48

Let's pretend this wasn't hurtin' me,
Let's pretend happiness was a certainty,
Imagine havin' no grades for University,
Or no doubt was lurkin' in my memory..
Pretend i kept insecurities,
An actor wasn't what i'd prefer to be,
I fucked every girl actin' flirtly,
And i'll be 33 with a degree in Surgery,
But don't pretend cos that was never me,
Through hellish shit i repped heavenly,
For every bit of abuse sent to me,
I secretly grew a year more mentally,
So again and again they'd step to me,
I'd use words, no fists, no weaponry,
I was special, but i didn't know especially,
It took a friend to see the near end of me,
So if we all pretend collectively,
Then we all know what was meant to be,
But we all can't change what's yet to be,
Laugh at me, but i'm lecturin' respectfully,
A girl in world but thinkin' dirtily,
Pretend there were girls i went to see,
Pretend i lost it to a love rivalry,
Pretend i let the feelin' seep outta me,
Pretend in 10 years they're forgettin me,
And i'm only alive cos they're lettin' me,
Or you could view the shit differently,
Pretend they're blind, and i let 'em see,
Heavily i stacked burdens weighin' me,
Scrub painfully, but life isn't stainless see,
It's plain to see we're stuck in fakery,
Pretend to see, Pretend to bleed, and hope to be..

Airplanes, in the night sky, like shooting stars!
I could really use a wish right now, wish right now, wish right now..
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'If you do it, it's only to a degree, i am the AIDS.. No one wants to do it with me..'
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Re: Airplanes

Postby Pistolpoppin » Apr 22nd, '10, 05:43

This is nice bro, straight from the heart?
Maybe it's hatred I spew, maybe it's food for the spirit
Maybe it's beautiful music I made for you to just cherish
But I'm debated disputed hated and viewed in America
as a motherfuckin drug addict - like you didn't experiment?
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Re: Airplanes

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Apr 22nd, '10, 07:32

This is very personal and powerful. The way you kept the meaning intact throughout the piece was impressive.
The only negative, I'd say, is the ill advised pairing of "was a certainty" and "university".
Do to others whatever you would like them to do to you. This is the essence of all that is taught in the law and the prophets.
-Matthew 7:12

-Chaos zawladnal światem po raz kolejny-
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Re: Airplanes

Postby Recovery2010 » Apr 22nd, '10, 15:19

Lets pretend, I do make it big
And all this shit blows up from the tube to the top chart hits
To the music video clips,
And my fan base is so big no one believes it

100,000k in one stadium its like unseen shit
It takes one hit to get there but it’s hard to achieve it
From a kid like me from a town like mine
And a genre like this im the end of this rap decline

One day I want to wake up in someone else’s shoes
Put the Nikes on, when I walk everybody else moves
Either that or they come running to me
Want my autograph but my top security will move em for me

And one day I want to earn my first million
Then when I look back I wont ever need this shit again
Cause ill be lounging around in my mansion
All these plaques on the wall, boy ill be a champion
"anyone who's ever been through shit in their lives, till' they sit and they cry at night wishin' they die, till' they throw on a rap record, and they sit n' they vibe, were nothing to you but were the fucking shit in their eyes!"
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Re: Airplanes

Postby Ticalrecords » Apr 23rd, '10, 03:29

dude im feelin it, there were a few rhymes tht seemed off but overall it was legit man keep doin ur thing. :y:

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Re: Airplanes

Postby gutawafang » Apr 26th, '10, 08:56

Pretty good man. Looks personal to me. :y:
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