Gates of Pain verse

[WhatsAnEnigma]

Surrounding is created from reading "Things Fall Apart" for school..not done but I'll continue to edit this. I read people's stuff on here and some lay out their story-esque raps very nice and I'd like to make mine more enjoyable like that eventually with imagery and all.

I struggle to maintain beyond the gates of pain
A burning passion of vengeance that hates the reign,
Fate's destined yet I shield and protect my soul
Don't abate intentions, wield and project my bow
Knifing lashes and bright-moon's light dying masses
My son's voice finds me despite the blackness
I fight the reaction, destined to display bold actions
Not knowing the pain'll never relent like Kratos ashes
His words choke, calling for help vomiting's envoked
My spirit appears broke but weakness I can't show
Standing there forcing my heart back down my throat
Opening my eyes, energized, I deliver the blow..(more to come)