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Postby Edge » May 13th, '10, 02:53

Welcome everybody, welcome, the champ is back
Samurai sword, leaves more than cramps in backs
I aint tryin to get biblical but the cain enables
And these other rappers just keep on sayin fables
I don’t stop believing, as Im on my journey
Cause I stick to my gun, like Burt did Ernie
I got tracks in my head, that’s my train of thought
People said bring the heat, so the pain I brought
Oh, you’re the top dog? Well call A.S.P.C.A.
Because It just so happens, I am a beast this way
In my speech I say, how I will feast this day
Until my cotton mouth’s teeth decay
Reach this way and I will take away your right to bear arms
Leave you more holy, than in church with prayer psalms
I scare moms into handing over their offspring
A million for my verses seems like a fair offering
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: its been a while

Postby gutawafang » May 13th, '10, 02:57

Didn't like the first line.

Nice punch.
Oh, you’re the top dog? Well call A.S.P.C.A.

LOLz
Leave you more holy, than in church with prayer psalms

Overall, vocabularily good. I like the punches man. ;)

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Re: its been a while

Postby classthe_king » May 13th, '10, 03:01

Some good punches, some good rhymes. Good to have you back, keep working :y:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: its been a while

Postby Edge » May 13th, '10, 03:03

thanks guys appreciate the feed :y:
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Re: its been a while

Postby Element. » May 13th, '10, 16:27

Nice, good to see you back
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Re: its been a while

Postby Spyder » May 16th, '10, 05:29

i thought u died :O

but not bad piece, can tell your a little rusty. right as you were getting there u left
so once u warm up again ill be interested to see where u stand
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