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What You Know About That.

Postby MC Anonymous » May 15th, '10, 21:08

What you know about the hardships?
What you know about the people that are there, that are lost in conquests?
What you know about the pain inside?
What you know about the history my brain resides?
What you know about the Mayan calender and the sun stone?
What you know about everything that will go unfold?
What you know about shame?
What you know about the plane, that DIDN'T smash the world trade?
What you know about the government?
What you know about Jacobs ladder, Project Blue Beam and the other shit
What you know about HAARP
What you know about Haitians that died from it's streams
What you know about Weather Control
What you know about Patriot Act, and how it severs you soul
What you know about Censorship?
What you know about these words, will you censor this?

..What you know about that..
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: What You Know About That.

Postby Emadyville » May 15th, '10, 21:11

It's good that it's short, otherwise repeating that would have gotten real annoying, very interesting tho, I like the concept and the ending a lot :y:
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Re: What You Know About That.

Postby MC Anonymous » May 15th, '10, 21:13

Emadyville wrote:It's good that it's short, otherwise repeating that would have gotten real annoying, very interesting tho, I like the concept and the ending a lot :y:

I'd advise you to research anything you're not familiar with in this verse, and you'd appreciate it's depth a lot more. :worship:
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Re: What You Know About That.

Postby classthe_king » May 15th, '10, 21:29

Really good verse, like I said earlier it reminds me of Prince Ea
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Re: What You Know About That.

Postby Tash8 » May 15th, '10, 21:30

good job on this immortal technique!
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Re: What You Know About That.

Postby MC Anonymous » May 15th, '10, 23:22

First I get compared to Canibus, Then Prince EA, now Immortal Technique. 3 distinct variations and flows. Damn. I must be the Hip Hop chameleon.
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Re: What You Know About That.

Postby Tash8 » May 15th, '10, 23:45

MC Anonymous wrote:First I get compared to Canibus, Then Prince EA, now Immortal Technique. 3 distinct variations and flows. Damn. I must be the Hip Hop chameleon.


damn! it sucks that you're compared to three dope rappers that really never made it though.
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Re: What You Know About That.

Postby mcZu » May 16th, '10, 00:08

Other than using the word ''shit'' it's great. Since I read it as a poem, the word ''shit'' felt really out of place. It's not like it is prohibited to utilize the word ''shit'' in poetry, but it pulls down the quality of such a piece.
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Re: What You Know About That.

Postby classthe_king » May 16th, '10, 04:47

Tash8 wrote:
MC Anonymous wrote:First I get compared to Canibus, Then Prince EA, now Immortal Technique. 3 distinct variations and flows. Damn. I must be the Hip Hop chameleon.


damn! it sucks that you're compared to three dope rappers that really never made it though.


I would rather be compared to them then 90% of all rappers who made it big
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Re: What You Know About That.

Postby Spyder » May 16th, '10, 05:24

classthe_king wrote:
Tash8 wrote:
MC Anonymous wrote:First I get compared to Canibus, Then Prince EA, now Immortal Technique. 3 distinct variations and flows. Damn. I must be the Hip Hop chameleon.


damn! it sucks that you're compared to three dope rappers that really never made it though.


I would rather be compared to them then 90% of all rappers who made it big


by big meaning mainstream poppy shit yes.


and as a poem was nice, nothing special but nice
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Re: What You Know About That.

Postby gutawafang » May 16th, '10, 10:57

Poetic. :y:
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