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Fuck Newbz

Postby E-40 » Jun 1st, '10, 08:35

I'm doper than coke, packed, delivered, and chopped
Apollo Creed rap, you gotta deal with the Rock
I got the steel (blat!) you pack a shiv on the block
Show me ya flow black like oil spills in the dock
For real, peeling ya top, bitch, blowing that wig
like toupees in the wind, you got to pay if you win
slaying ya men, shit, I'm cruel and a vet
so I shot em on they set like a movie direct
I'm pullin in checks, puttin money where my mouth is
Daffy Duck, bills up front, I'm an accountant
about bricks, ask ya bitch I been laying
I bricked in her face like I make ends as a mason
simply amazin, my metal stay tied to my side
we like siamese twins, intertwined with our lives
homicide ain't a crime, if the punishment is death sir
might as well starve an anorexic till she's better
my vendetta, is with labels selling the same style
either you black with a pack, or twisted cap claiming 8 mile
I stay vile, grimey, greasy, thuggin in old jeans
new G's like C bra's, they couldn't take D's/dees



Lil freestyle I wrote on my black berry for all these newbs. Lmao at this site, Y'all ain't Eminem. :laughing:
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby ChronicJon » Jun 1st, '10, 09:42

I love WRITING freestyles. Do you love WRITING freestyles? WRITE/RIGHT now (wordplay :8)) I'm WRITING a freestyle. WRITING styles that free is good :y:
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby classthe_king » Jun 3rd, '10, 02:55

I don't know who you are but you suck :tounge2:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 3rd, '10, 02:55

I wanna thank you for my new avy
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby E-40 » Jun 3rd, '10, 04:56

ChronicJon wrote:I love WRITING freestyles. Do you love WRITING freestyles? WRITE/RIGHT now (wordplay :8)) I'm WRITING a freestyle. WRITING styles that free is good :y:


Big L did the same thing.

classthe_king wrote:I don't know who you are but you suck :tounge2:


Hop off my nut sac bitch

DƎRDYPK wrote:I wanna thank you for my new avy


It's over 9000!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 3rd, '10, 04:58

I like the verse too though :smoking: :y:
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby E-40 » Jun 3rd, '10, 05:00

Yeah I stay fresh. Gotta keep my spit game tight so when a nigga try n test I'm not rusty.
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 3rd, '10, 05:01

word the fuck up
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby Solace » Jun 6th, '10, 03:14

Dopeness Cole.
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby AbramIsaac » Jun 6th, '10, 05:52

Keepin' it tight like virgin vagina. :y:
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby Solace » Jun 6th, '10, 06:07

iPsycho wrote:Your not much of a old member your self, but dope lyrics.

By Newbz I'm pretty sure he meant newbz@ writing.
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Re: Fuck Newbz

Postby neversnooze » Jun 6th, '10, 20:50

e-40 i dont like your style one bit. i will keep this short and simple. you were balanced on the multies, but one part sounds like it was 'dragged' just to rhyme(referring to the mason line). the flow was out of sync. all in all, it was a freestyle, so its a very good attempt.

rate:4/10 i will leave better feedback on your next piece( if i see potential in the verse) take care :wave:
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