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Expectation / The Final Answer

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Expectation / The Final Answer

Postby ShaBruv » Jun 10th, '10, 20:42

I'm new to this so dont hate, much, i did post some old creative writing material under the name ShadyBruvaz but i feel this is my best piece, so far only 1st verse and chorus i'll add others if people like it.
This is to Imortal Techniques Point of no return, and i spit it with a fast flow
Oh and btw the way thats a homage, im not biting


Expectations on my shoulders, like boulders, my bsak is foldin'
Shoulder blades erodin' from this heavy load i'm holdin,
Life goes much too slow and everyday i'm growing cold 'n'
Now i'm stuck self loathing, but fuck it i'll stop the scoldin'
I'm gettin where i want, fuck those who stop me and the haters
Cuz my goals are so high i'm gon' need escalators
Fuck the undecided, divided, and debators
Can't follow in my footsteps , but you can step in my crators
Now i'm rolling with Lewis and of course there's Justin Kanzah
Its he who approves my verse when i begin to bust my stanzah
I dont have much cash but soon i'll hit the bonanza
I aint a millionaire but fucker this is my final answer,

I'm a do something, of which i can be proud
Staring into space i wish my nan could see me now
I prayed for a change, thank you lord that change has come
I'll stay and rap for my life, i'ma prove myself son
I can easily now exceed my expectations
I know you want to retaliate but you won't dare,
Cause you fuckin with some ****** like this who just don't care.

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Re: Expectation / The Final Answer

Postby SoldierShady » Jun 10th, '10, 21:45

:coffee:
"So one last time, I'm back, 'fore it fades into black and it's all over, behold the final chapter in the saga, trying to recapture that lightning trapped in a bottle twice, the magic that started it all...tragic portrait of an artist tortured....trapped in his own drawings..." - Bruce.

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Re: Expectation / The Final Answer

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 10th, '10, 21:50

I was reading this to the instrumental & it goes together pretty well :y:
keep it up :b:
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Re: Expectation / The Final Answer

Postby ShaBruv » Jun 10th, '10, 21:54

DƎRDYPK wrote:I was reading this to the instrumental & it goes together pretty well :y:
keep it up :b:


yeah thankyou except the chorus though
I know you want to retaliate but you won't dare,
Cause you fuckin with some ****** like this who just don't care.

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Re: Expectation / The Final Answer

Postby TheKanza » Jun 10th, '10, 22:05

SoldierShady wrote::coffee:


let's see what u can do then
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Re: Expectation / The Final Answer

Postby neversnooze » Jun 10th, '10, 23:14

i liked it , excluding your chorus. not much to really say other than the middle part of your verse was short, could have been longer and evened out with the other bars.
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Re: Expectation / The Final Answer

Postby gutawafang » Jun 11th, '10, 01:54

The flow is good man, thanks to the multis I assume. LOL. Nice one man. The title is not good though. LOL.
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Re: Expectation / The Final Answer

Postby SoldierShady » Jun 11th, '10, 13:31

jkanzah wrote:
SoldierShady wrote::coffee:


let's see what u can do then


:coffee:
"So one last time, I'm back, 'fore it fades into black and it's all over, behold the final chapter in the saga, trying to recapture that lightning trapped in a bottle twice, the magic that started it all...tragic portrait of an artist tortured....trapped in his own drawings..." - Bruce.

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Re: Expectation / The Final Answer

Postby ShaBruv » Jun 11th, '10, 18:07

SoldierShady wrote:
jkanzah wrote:
SoldierShady wrote::coffee:


let's see what u can do then


:coffee:

Lol
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