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Love Me

Postby gutawafang » Jun 14th, '10, 08:00

To this beat obviously,
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ghEbAIKwvIw

Written in 77 minutes. Scrap material in other words. :coffee:

Feedback please! :happy:

Don’t wanna be down anymore, sick of my daily pills
Crossing my fingers in hope, love, don’t fail me please
Give me this moment to speak, this only chance to bespeak
The only time I translate my feelings into words that would stick
To remind you, like a note in your office, placed on your wall
High up, why don’t you frame it just in case it would fall?
Damn, I feel it this time, I’ll sing it like an anthem
It might be true I dedicate this to a girl at random
Then it’s as true as how I actually feel for you
How this song that I would write for her but it’s still for you
And when you smile as you might hear your name being mentioned
Relieves the stress within me, between us the insane tension
I might be saying it like I mean it, so now you seen it
This is the way that I feel it, and by the minute
As you be touched by these words that I try to verbalize
That I love you unconditioned, so why don’t you realize?

I just wanna love you for the rest of my life
I’m gonna hold you in the morning
Hold you through the night

When I write a song and vocalize it, it doesn’t mean that
It’s the first time that I tries it, this isn’t the first clean set
I’ve written too much, but not sufficient for you
Why would I stop? Why should I listen to you?
I think this is even more romantic than the flowers
It makes you cry harder than the fall of Twin Towers
I stress the impact that it causes when I miss you, it kills me
And I mean I really miss you, physically, you feel me?
I want you by my side, whether or not I could embrace you
There’s no one in this world that could actually replace you
It sounds cliché, but I would say it and repeat it
I’m not ok, my tears they flow like the ocean, believe it
A lot of things I wanna say, words just for you to hear
I repeat it that I’m not okay, it hurts that you ain’t here
I want you to look inside, deep inside my lethal eyes
In death I solemnize, I love you, now we’re legalized

I just wanna love you for the rest of my life
I’m gonna hold you in the morning
Hold you through the night

Marriage just for the name, it’s a paper just to show the world
That you’re the only one I love, you’ll be the only girl
The only person that would make me happy for no reason
Prettier than the flakes that fall in snow season
No, it’s not the beauty of it, it’s the cause of its beauty
It’s incomplete without you, it’s like your duty
The job that God sent to make you do, you fulfill it now
As I show you my gratitude with love, now I spill it out
Full of feelings, filing the entire container to the brim
It requires to be returned, because it ain’t just a scheme
It isn’t lust, it’s torture that you put me when you ignore
Obligation you don’t have it, I used to say it before
I would do this again, I won’t just leave it like that
I might be ending the song, but I will be right back
Just to prove it that I love you, and that I’m willing to
Give you all my heart, you see I’m revealing you

I just wanna love you for the rest of my life
I’m gonna hold you in the morning
Hold you through the night
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Re: Love Me

Postby macdaddy019967 » Jun 14th, '10, 08:08

i don't really like love songs type of shit
but i can dig this shit up a bit :y:
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Re: Love Me

Postby gutawafang » Jun 14th, '10, 08:18

macdaddy019967 wrote:i don't really like love songs type of shit
but i can dig this shit up a bit :y:

hahhaa. thanks for reading homie. :)
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Re: Love Me

Postby gutawafang » Jun 16th, '10, 02:11

Bump.
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Re: Love Me

Postby Fa-Q » Jun 16th, '10, 02:23

Is this poetry or written like a rap? Because I read it like poetry anyway its pretty good...an objection I had was the tears, ocean line. That line is so overused that the only way you can use it without sounding corny is to use either tears or ocean and compare them to something else...or change something about it...but good piece
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Re: Love Me

Postby gutawafang » Jun 16th, '10, 03:20

Fa-Q wrote:Is this poetry or written like a rap? Because I read it like poetry anyway its pretty good...an objection I had was the tears, ocean line. That line is so overused that the only way you can use it without sounding corny is to use either tears or ocean and compare them to something else...or change something about it...but good piece

:) Thanks you for the feeback homie. :flower:
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