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The Slaughter

Postby classthe_king » Jun 22nd, '10, 19:28

Another Free Verse

I ain’t here to start braggin and boastin on tracks
I am just sitting here relaxin, proposin the facts
All of these dudes rappin and knowin there wack
Are done, when I come back in I’m closin the acts
Imposin my wrath, ferocious in fact, leavin more dead
I tore shreds with more hotlines then Satan’s forehead
I don’t ignore threats, the skill you have immersed
Will soon fire shots that will fill you when dispersed
I’ll put you on my album but I’ll bill you on the verse
You couldn’t rip the second if I killed you on the first
I’m grim reapin this bitch, get heaved in a ditch
As I conjure rhymes straight from the deepest abyss
No reason for this, you don’t need to fuckin tell us
What to do, one punch and your guts will swell up
I’m from Dayton now and I’m ready to take em out
So cut the tongue from Satans mouth and shut the hell up
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: The Slaughter

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 22nd, '10, 19:31

pretty nice pretty nice
really love the end

classthe_king wrote:cut the tongue from Satans mouth and shut the hell up


:o FUCK
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Re: The Slaughter

Postby Element. » Jun 22nd, '10, 22:32

classthe_king wrote:
So cut the tongue from Satans mouth and shut the hell up


Someone's going on the naughty list. :n: :p

but really good loved it!
Last edited by Element. on Jun 23rd, '10, 19:26, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: The Slaughter

Postby Spyder » Jun 23rd, '10, 03:22

thats two punches on "hotlines"...

nice piece again man, i love your frees

i flowed this and had the same feel as "First Session"
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Re: The Slaughter

Postby Solace » Jun 25th, '10, 00:18

My god that was dope as fuck.
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Re: The Slaughter

Postby classthe_king » Jun 26th, '10, 00:27

Thanks guys :worship:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: The Slaughter

Postby MoltenMetalMan » Jun 26th, '10, 08:41

A ton of filler rhyme but it was good filler rhyme. Really dope end punch. REALLY DOPE.
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