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It's My World ,!,,^_^,,!,

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 21st, '10, 03:35

some nonsense I did when I was baked


I can't stand wack motherfuckers you really believe these chumps hard?
I might as well be working for Nestle's chocolate the ways I "Crunch Bars"
you think that's sick, this is sick. but what do you know about dope raps?
If I write another verse inside of my notepad it might turn into a coke bag!
I don't care about how you hoes act. most women are mad slutty
you wanna be my butterfly?! well i'm taken bitch your ugly!
get away don't touch me! i'll crack you with uppercut
you a wasted piece of sperm that shoulda been shot into your mothers butt
you say you run the cold streets? I'm taking over the whole globe
your trapped with nowhere to go. caught up in my snow globe
all I do is blow dro & be myself. I don't need to tease crews
because mc's are like candy to me I gotta sweet tooth
I kill "Mikes" so much......I might as well be dissing myself
but my heads up my own ass & I can't stop kissing myself
are you kissing my ass too? I hope so I'm godly
but that's how Rhyma Lions are not a rhyme goes sloppy
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Postby classthe_king » Jun 21st, '10, 03:42

That was dope lol
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Postby Spyder » Jun 23rd, '10, 03:25

idk man i wasnt really feelin it, simple rhyming and not really complex punches or anything

but idk man just me :sweating:
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Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 23rd, '10, 03:28

all is good Spyderman :smoking:
like I said in the original post

it's some nonsense I did when I was baked :sweating:
I need to step it up & think of some shit in my sleep :sleeping:

peace yall
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Postby shadyfreakzul » Jun 23rd, '10, 22:21

dope.but if i may ask arent you coleon by chance?
I'm strong, my word is Bond like James
Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 23rd, '10, 22:55

naw I'm not Cole
just a good friend of his :b:
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Postby FAME » Jun 23rd, '10, 22:57

Dope punchlines man :y: Sweet lines for something just put together
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Postby shadyfreakzul » Jun 23rd, '10, 23:02

DƎRDYPK wrote:naw I'm not Cole
just a good friend of his :b:

the way you posted your lyrics made me wonder.i see from arrinef sig that coleon is dead how true is that?
I'm strong, my word is Bond like James
Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 23rd, '10, 23:08

not so true
it isn't like homeboy jumped outta a building set on fire & cracked his head off the pavement
I'm talking to him now :smoking:
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Postby shadyfreakzul » Jun 23rd, '10, 23:13

-Steven- wrote:
DƎRDYPK wrote:not so true
it isn't like homeboy jumped outta a building set on fire & cracked his head off the pavement
I'm talking to him now :smoking:




you see dead people. :worship:

lol
I'm strong, my word is Bond like James
Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Postby Solace » Jun 28th, '10, 04:41

I can't stand wack motherfuckers you really believe these chumps hard?
I might as well be working for Nestle's chocolate the ways I "Crunch Bars"
you think that's sick, this is sick. but what do you know about dope raps?
If I write another verse inside of my notepad it might turn into a coke bag!


Probably the only highlight of this, but then again that means you started off the piece great despite it means it got really Ehh after that. Lol@Azn emotes in the title. Overall it was average. Better than your other one though which I previously commented on, "lemme kick a rhyme" or something haha.
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