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Somebody Call 911, Strictt A fire burning on the Stan Boards

Postby Solace » Jul 4th, '10, 04:47

Woahaahh. Another quick one...Come on SA let's do it up

You'll rue-the-fight, thinking those quick-punches-lasted-weeks,
Out of what you choose-to-bite you picked-fuckin'-Cassidy?
I'm half-as-ill? Shit I'm laughing-still, I'm booked-as-half-as-weak,
You half as big, the weight on my back could-collapse-ya-knees,
Put-this-back-to-sheets, think you're ruthless-on-your-throne?
Only 'assisted suicide' 'cause you're too stupid to do-it-on-your-own,
Spit-in-ya-face, rip-in-ya-name, you getting hurt-by-strangers,
Trigger-my fingers-guy then you'll get murked-by-chambers,
They say rap-is-art, I'll blast-this-tart, I'm way-fucking-honest,
Like wack-shit on his canvas, he just threw paint-buckets-on-it,
He stays-something-omish, he can't go-stack-the-heat-up,
It's a Royal Rumble because he only throws-out-the-weak-stuff,
You're right, no man was created equal, you were nothing-special,
I guess God's got a grudge against you, you're fucking-mental,
My rhymes-are-best-just-face-it, you whine-with-desperation,
Your lines-are-messed-and-wasted, this is YOUR final-destination.
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Re: Somebody Call 911, Strictt A fire burning on the Stan Boards

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jul 4th, '10, 04:59

why are you doing - in every fucking line? lol, joking..

sick :worship: but SA is :whistle:
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Re: Somebody Call 911, Strictt A fire burning on the Stan Boards

Postby Solace » Jul 4th, '10, 05:00

Thanks for checking it. I used the -'s (though it was probably rhetorical question for you) to help myself get the flow right in my mind. And SA can slaughter me, I know this...I just need to step up up and I'm giving myself a wake up call since I've been out of writing the past months.
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Re: Somebody Call 911, Strictt A fire burning on the Stan Boards

Postby Spyder » Jul 4th, '10, 18:33

shit was tight bro got some nice multies and vocab in there

need to step up ya punches for this one though :y:
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Re: Somebody Call 911, Strictt A fire burning on the Stan Boards

Postby Solace » Jul 4th, '10, 18:49

You know I'm not good at punches soo yeah, this is time to improve on them..Thanks for the feedback :y:
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Postby Spyder » Jul 4th, '10, 18:58

might let a couple float ya way :shifty:
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Postby Strictt Ame » Jul 4th, '10, 19:26

I got you in a little bit Sol..btw multis and flow were crazy..
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