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Within lies the rhythm

Postby mcZu » Aug 10th, '10, 02:31

A verse I wrote on a grime beat. Feedback is appreciated. Enjoy.

Most rap verses are just... superficial fictional rhymes
Fake directional confessional aspects from arsenal lines
Aside of that it has conditionals out of line
Reflecting conversational perceptional exceptional
Expectedness from a mind... covered in a counter educational
Delusional cloak... sprinkled with devotional emotional
Dysfunctional lines with no hope.. One dimensional raps
That are in line with visional examinational external
Threats... from the human fraternal frictional
Impersonal tendencies to act egotistical and cynical against enemies
Bunch of visible sinful irrational rappers... with no original
Ideas or relevant factors, your just juvenal... I’m the French poet Juvenal
You need to posses the positional processional professional attributes
Of eternal retinal word usage with emcee vocational facts, truths...
And realistic artistic arsenic variational ties
Or, as some say, just plain vaticanal sensational lies
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
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Re: Within lies the rhythm

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 10th, '10, 02:59

Great vocabulary....what is a grime beat though?
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Re: Within lies the rhythm

Postby gutawafang » Aug 10th, '10, 04:16

Fa-Q wrote:Great vocabulary....what is a grime beat though?

the beat is like... slower than usual. i dont know how to explain. i typed on youtube for examples. xD

Anyways, the fucking vocabulary in here is dope man. I also like the rhymes. I can't really flow but maybe cuz the words are "harder" to pronounce. :sweating:
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