Shadows f. Sentus & Solace

[mcZu]

(Zu)
You can find me in the shadows.. shifting
Just ‘cause I’m alive doesn’t mean I’m living
People kept on hating since I met them
They talk behind my back, ‘cause I’m ahead of them
I’m not mad at them, I just write back
When they hate it means you’re on the right track
I’m right at the verge of crashing.. again
Losing a loved one is everlasting, and then
You have to fight these preposterous issues
I can feel it in my esophagus.. I miss you
But you’ll be back, at least.. I wish
Opportunities are never lost, that is..
I just hope nobody takes the ones I missed
People just want to be deceived
Because the truth hurts when received
I agree with Oscar Wilde, that’s the secret of life
The shadows are wild, but the secret of lies
Lies right underneath the romantic sunset
Semantics unchecked show the showmanship on set
Of deception..

You can find me in the shadows..

(Sentus)
I travel this road alone and it doesn’t seem to end
I’m starting to think there’s no such thing as friends
I dream again, it’s the only way to keep hope near
So that I won’t tear and live my life with no fear
I could see so clear up until you threw it all away
I’m just left to wonder would I do it all the same
Cause you were the one but soon it faded strong
I thought the pain was gone I even made the song
But with this tainted bond we’ll never hope to sing
Or play anymore music on these broken strings
They’re just frozen dreams, the trust was shattered
And then I realized that she must have mattered
I was crushed and battered so I mistrusted my help
I couldn’t look in a mirror cause I disgusted myself
It seems like everyone else is making that old sound
And if I take a leap of faith I fall to this cold ground

You can find me in the shadows..

(Solace)
There's nothing here, now I'm alone and I'm naked,
Stuck with tears and grown to be emotionally played with,
With fuckin' beer, that man was as odd as could be,
Became a drunken peer, and no, not a father to me...
And as a child I would always defeat my slumber,
Just to watch that excuse for a dad beat my mother,
Then I moved away because my parents divorced,
Waiting for a new family and so I'd stare at the door,
Being careless and more....Growing up low as fuck,
Taking it day by day without ever knowing much...
It hurts, it seems that forever I'll be rejected by a girl,
It's worse, knowing that I'm neglected by the world,
Been respected and it twirls and the tables turn,
My reputation downs, see how much the labels earn,
I've got the heart but it seems all I need is the beat...
They wanted my demise, prepare to read it and weep...

You can find me in the shadows..

[Solace]

HOLY WOW.

Zu - you had some amazing vocab in there, at points i lost your flow but it was still a great verse.

Sentus - top notch as always, you always have an amazing flow.

Solace - your emotion really stood out on this, and the flow was nice too.


incredible piece guys, legendary.

Thank you, I appreciate that you really do seem to enjoy this piece.

^ If this is legendary then.... Nevermind, hahaha.



Anyway, I'm not gonna jump on your dicks like this steven kid does. But I was pleasently surprised by this piece.

I felt the emotion of all 3 verse. Zu, I think portrayed what he was saying the best. Sentus had some pretty dope lines. Solace, your verse seemed stop and go to me. I mean, you were saying what you needed to but the flow just seemed off to me.

Overall it was a decent read. I'd like to hear it recorded to give proper critique.

I also appreciate that because I myself know that this is no where near "legendary" but if Steven wishes to think that, that's completely fine with me. Thanks for peeping this, SiiNiDE

Pretty damn good... good vocab, lyrics, imagery. I love the concepts, even though they're similar to others, they're played out very well.

Well none of us read eachothers verses before writing our own, so the similarities weren't on purpose. Thanks for checking it out Maybe.

[mcZu]

Thanks for the feed guys. It's more than appreciated. If you want me to return the feed, just PM me and I'll make sure to do so.

[classthe_king]

Thanks for the feed everyone I wrote this verse as I was almost falling asleep on the keyboard so I honestly hate my verse. But I appreciate the kind words.

[Solace]

I just realized this was a 5 Star Generals piece

[mcZu]

^Word. The only Generals left on TR.

[Yah-hah]

^^ yup lol generals on the emotional side But yeah man good to hear from you finally Zu. Great piece all three had great emotion and choice of words. overall dope peice

[ChinaShopTaurus]

The other people on here are alot worse than you guys

[Yah-hah]

The other people on here are alot worse than you guys

[mcZu]

Thanks guys, appreciate it. And, yeah, Stevie is that good, you won't even see him coming in a fight.

[Just Silver]

I liked Zu's (...) lines it worked well plus great vocab

Sentus had a great flow but there were points i felt commas would have made it better

Solace had flow and imagery on lock

[mcZu]

Thanks for the feed, Silv. Appreciate it.