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Til' Infinity

Postby ThomasJ » Aug 26th, '10, 14:05

Have you ever wondered what it's like on the other side
The place that transcends space and time
Intergalactic journey,destination soul
Far beyond what the Revelations told
On my last quest for eternal satisfaction
But if I dig too deep I'll cause a chain reaction
I think about this stuff every single day
Some are too smart,so the price of life they need to pay
What's true,what's fake,are we really puppets
Controlled by a higher being,why we really suffer?
War is uncalled for,it's something we all know
Why do we hate the country we take a fall for?
Sometimes I wonder will I ever find out
The real truth 'bout life,or will I live in the dark
So as long as I'm alive I'll continue to envision it
The place where everything is infinite
Last edited by ThomasJ on Aug 26th, '10, 19:46, edited 1 time in total.
...The mortician of love, sent from above
Forced entry, the more wenchy, the more stingy I become
Been doing this for more than a quarter century, I'm just numb...
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Re: Til' Infinity

Postby Robbie G » Aug 26th, '10, 14:26

Deep stuff man :y:

The first few liens reminded me of a Nas song,
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Re: Til' Infinity

Postby ThomasJ » Aug 26th, '10, 14:41

Thanks Robbie. :b:
...The mortician of love, sent from above
Forced entry, the more wenchy, the more stingy I become
Been doing this for more than a quarter century, I'm just numb...
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Re: Til' Infinity

Postby DƎRDYPK » Aug 26th, '10, 19:53

it's iight bro

the vocab is there
the rhymes are there

the only thing you need to work on really is your flow
but once you upgrade on that you'll be all set my dude
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Re: Til' Infinity

Postby ThomasJ » Aug 26th, '10, 19:55

DƎRDYPK wrote:it's iight bro

the vocab is there
the rhymes are there

the only thing you need to work on really is your flow
but once you upgrade on that you'll be all set my dude

Thanks Derdy. :y:
The flow is dope tho,that's one of the things I pay most attention to.
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Forced entry, the more wenchy, the more stingy I become
Been doing this for more than a quarter century, I'm just numb...
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