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for my own sake

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 19th, '10, 12:24

didn't i consider gettin my head together when everything really mattered?
cuz instead i'm not feelin better but sadder since i'm lettin my bitterness set in

so when will i ever be able to sever my tether cuz no way i can settle
although you say i should stay at this level when i never wanted to play

but rather battle each day with the devil until i'm ready to stray from the shadows
yet they will forever haunt me always which i maybe can't handle

so not knowin if i'll decay in my mental i'm growin more crazy than pictured
who says it's that simple, my fate's to remember what's made me assembled

created out clay, then again i can go when i finish i pray
but as i look at my window, the tint only fades

where i sense holes with visions of gray intendin to break
hintin my beginning's the endin or am i too late?

i should've paid some attention and attempted my mission for my own sake...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: for my own sake

Postby Just Silver » Aug 20th, '10, 18:02

Very weird structure was hard to flow for me but it seemed that was the problem
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Re: for my own sake

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 23rd, '10, 13:00

yeah, it's difficult for me to structure, but the smooth flow is there
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: for my own sake

Postby Rain Matrix » Aug 23rd, '10, 18:12

I picked up the flow it just didn't translate well to the stucture I usually see
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Re: for my own sake

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 24th, '10, 09:52

that's understandable, ne ways, i thought you left rain...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: for my own sake

Postby Weather Man » Aug 25th, '10, 06:23

Not really understanding where this piece is heading but as previous posters said, it's hard to make it flow maybe it's me, maybe after a couple more reads i'll get to understand this more, but for now it's not that bad :y:
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Re: for my own sake

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 26th, '10, 22:30

thanx for reading, too bad u don't understand
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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