The Madness

[Ąbsølute]

Inside it resides in your mind, in your pride
When you lying, when your tryin to deny then
full control it just dives in, through your skull
when your vibin, there's no describin
when it's alive n your whole bodys dying
i'm striving, mind set on surviving
feelin as vital as a blind mans eye
then I look up to the sky, sit idle
wonder why I was sent here
I'm scared head full of fear
I feel bare when I look in the mirror
The madness has taken over as I peer
into my own reflection, my prediction
is the end is near, no perfection is clear
look ear to ear, but nothing is pure
my complexion disappears, no cure.

[classthe_king]

Madness? This is TRSHADY!

[Sam.]

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[classthe_king]

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Ohhhhhhh, okay

[Ąbsølute]

Really? So no feedback?

[classthe_king]

Really? So no feedback?

What feedback do you want? You used very basic rhymes in a boring verse.

[Ąbsølute]

Really? So no feedback?

What feedback do you want? You used very basic rhymes in a boring verse.

Well... thanks a lot.

[Devil'sAdvocate]

Just work on your skills

your rhymes so basic.

[Ąbsølute]

Inside, resides in , pride when, ly-in, try-in, deny then, control dives in, skull vib-in, de-scribin, alive n,
whole dy-in, stri-vin, sur-viv-in, vital eye, sky, idle why, here, fear, bare, mirror, peer, re-flec-tion,pre-dic-tion ,near, per-fec-tion, clear, ear to ear, pure, com-plex-ion, dis-a-ppears, cure.

Just pointing out the rhymes and multis incase how I structured it made it appear different.

Jeez no hate guys. It wasn't meant to be a way lyrical piece, it was about the feeling.