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Economy 101

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Economy 101

Postby ThomasJ » Sep 9th, '10, 20:33

Economy's terrible,it's probably better to
Sit back,shit man,this poverty's spreading too
Unemployment rates at an all time high
Some people say in fact that we're all gon' die
Food,drink,books,kicks cost a lot more
Then they was a while back,and we all some buck whores
And if people still can't accept the fact we in recession
I guess I'ma have to say some shit while still in session
9.5 percent of people is unemployed
That's why the hoodlums is stealin' and gunnin' MORE
Then they used to... back in the day
Shit like this is what got me rapping this way
13 trillion dollars in debt,and a lot of mothers in debt
Fathers committing thefts,just so they could feed their kid
Impossible? Disturbing? I don't know what to call it
Oh by the way,you've just been relieved of your wallet































:sweating:
...The mortician of love, sent from above
Forced entry, the more wenchy, the more stingy I become
Been doing this for more than a quarter century, I'm just numb...
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Re: Economy 101

Postby Weather Man » Sep 10th, '10, 05:00

Not bad, little emotion in there, I guess by the way people read it, but overall you need to work on vocab you got a good flow not bad my friend not bad at all. :8)
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