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Postby Strictt Ame » Sep 12th, '10, 16:37

Sept 12

11:27am

Look I go in the booth exposin a tooth
And knowin the truth I'll be exposin a dude
Im too far ahead to be noticin you
My flowin is true never as bogus as you
The effort was always there, the motive is new
Cuz now I rhyme just to turn your bones into soup
Focus you fruit cuz Im killin and merkin the game
No not workin for fame, I only work if it pays
Minutes turn into hours, hours turn into days
Days into weeks, wreck weaks hurtin these lames
Im biserk in the brain so I take Perc's for the pain
So if theres a sure shot for success Im certain its Ame


11:37am

10 minutes, light work
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Re: Off the Top

Postby Strictt Ame » Sep 12th, '10, 17:07

Ehh..Id rather keep a good flow than take 10 minutes to force 8 terrible wordplay attempts
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Re: Off the Top

Postby Rain Matrix » Sep 12th, '10, 17:29

muti's were there forced in spots... flow was there but really wasn't getting at much

I'm gonna come back later and run through a 10 minute drill just for fun
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Re: Off the Top

Postby Strictt Ame » Sep 12th, '10, 18:20

whatever you say son..like I said, when I get a new pre-amp I'll gladly own you..and Ive seen your writtens..you sound like every other "underground" rapper who claims to hate the mainstream..so basically your just a back packer..seriously you sound like every other emcee who thinks artists like aesop rock, brother ali, and sage francis are the greatest thing to grab a mic..your ride a bandwagon, its just a very small, very predictable band wagon..so hop off my nuts cuz I'll wreck you in any form of rap you wanna try..
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Re: Off the Top

Postby Strictt Ame » Sep 12th, '10, 22:15

Yeh I dissed you..you gonna cry about it some more..or act like any REAL emcee would and respond..and yes hop off MY dick, I simply dissed you, now your following me around like an over obcessive ex-girlfriend commenting on everything I say..and if we are sooo bad then why the fuck do you keep logging back in to post? Seriously I have 350 posts since last October, you have over 400 in 4 months..get a fucking life..

And yes I know what redundant means, do you know what ignorance is cuz bragging that you rap about life and assuming I dont is pure ignorance..why dont you try listening to somebodies music before you catagorize them..dipshit..
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Re: Off the Top

Postby Slic » Sep 13th, '10, 02:08

Dude Strictt that wasn't your best, just drop those well thought out sick verses, I don't see how that took 10 minutes though...
you're about to get "blown away" like smif-n-wesson

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Re: Off the Top

Postby Strictt Ame » Sep 13th, '10, 04:33

Slic wrote:Dude Strictt that wasn't your best, just drop those well thought out sick verses, I don't see how that took 10 minutes though...

Well I was doing more than just straight typing..it was probably about 5 minutes of writing..I just typed in what time the clock said right before and right after..Im not worried about it too much..


And Sii..you have proved nothing..for such a "great" emcee you have only 4 songs I found on your soundclick which you dont even promote and I couldnt even find your name on google except for here..so either your a big nobody or your one of those morons with 100 aliases..
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Re: Off the Top

Postby Strictt Ame » Sep 13th, '10, 14:26

Well then I feel sorry for this site..and its kinda sad that youve been here 4 years (or rapping for 4 years period) and are still forcing metaphors and similies that bad..but oh well I guess the learning curve is low for you
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