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Postby Emadyville » Sep 16th, '10, 08:31

I never post my shit here and idk why, but anyway I just wrote this song I'll hopefully be recording tomorrow, I'ma just post my 3 verses without the hook :y:

So I’m sitting by my lonesome, alone some,
checking for a girl so I phone one hoping for a homerun,
and I don’t mean that slut or this slut,
I switched up in disgust thinking what we discussed,
what I mean is, only if she picks up,
but it’s fucked, I didn’t mean to disrupt,
yeah check it I’m back to wreck it,
and misrepresent what it is you respected,
see I’m back to write the darkest shit,
so I start this envisioning a carcass lit,
and it’s marvelous, see the spark and spit,
and it's arsenic how’d I harvest this?
well I harbored it, and kept going with that,
and when I saw the lit match, well I harnessed it,
yeah I’m back to send the world this in thoroughness,
and it’s almost as amazing as when two girls kiss…

If you thought I was told to chill,
know I’m cold as ice and twice folded still,
and I don’t even rhyme I suppose it’s ill,
to bulldoze and kill and just, mow at will,
so I don’t gotta flow you should know it’s still,
as the target moves I just wrote for thrills,
I said it’s cutthroat see it’s dope until,
a real throat gets cut and blood goes to spill,
I do it for the sport,
I do it for the fourth of you who support the three fourths of you,
that never gave shit so I’m forced to do,
what I’ve done here, and on a course anew, until I’m horse and blue,
I wait to be judged when the courts are due,
and the jury in,
I’ll give an injury till the gurney spins,
it’s my life in a journal let the journey begin…

I guess I’m just a misfit, and I missed this,
did this even spark your interest?
you dipshits, I am back to lift this,
to pick this up cause it’s more of a gift it’s,
not a picnic it’s life intrinsic,
despite what you like I will write to finish,
I will write till I diminish in a sentence, relentless as critics,
so I really I meant this shit it’s,
like a storm to inform the weak,
that as a norm I speak I'm here to warn the bleak,
that I been there,
plead the fifth I’m in gear,
to sincere-ly reappear then disappear,
yeah it’s magic I grab her, then murder,
haven’t you heard a abbra cadaver?
yeah it’s funny so laugh at that rap,
but it’s only really a joke if I back track…

this isn't meant as a serious song, tho the lyrics might portray it that way, it's more of a funny/serious song :y:
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Postby Yah-hah » Sep 16th, '10, 08:33

Yeah I got the flow pretty easy was like a real simple smooth peice I liked it. I like the way it started out with a really nice rhyme scheme. Your transitions from rhyme to rhyme were great too :y: Lookin forward to hearin it recorded
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Postby Emadyville » Sep 16th, '10, 08:35

Yah-hah wrote:Yeah I got the flow pretty easy was like a real simple smooth peice I liked it. I like the way it started out with a really nice rhyme scheme. Your transitions from rhyme to rhyme were great too :y: Lookin forward to hearin it recorded


thank you man I appreciate that.

I tried to break it up so people could get how I was flowing on this. the flow actually does switch up speeds sometimes and shit, which is what I like about, and the beats tight as hell, laid back but bumps. hopefully i get this done tomo :y:
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Postby Yah-hah » Sep 16th, '10, 08:39

Lookin forward to it. Yeah my flow switches up alot from slow to fast too. Mind feedin my latest peice :D
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Postby Emadyville » Sep 16th, '10, 08:39

Yah-hah wrote:Lookin forward to it. Yeah my flow switches up alot from slow to fast too. Mind feedin my latest peice :D


sure thing sir :y:
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