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Re: A quick 10 minute verse

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 17th, '10, 03:10

real good material, i'd polish it up a lil bit if u want a verse/song from this

one question:

little piece meat of meat in slacks


is that an error? should it be "little piece of meat" instead?
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: A quick 10 minute verse

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 17th, '10, 03:19

cool man, i'll check it out tomorrow then
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: A quick 10 minute verse

Postby Steve Spag » Sep 17th, '10, 04:57

Great shit man, I loved that verse. The ending was real nice too, good looks on the name drop haha. The whole thing was structurally sound, dude. The flow was really crazy at some points and your vocab. (as usual) was just soo entertaining. Hope you recorded this, can't wait to hear what you've been up to these past couple weeks!
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Re: A quick 10 minute verse

Postby Weather Man » Sep 17th, '10, 06:59

Wow I'm really amazed by this piece, this was great man, keep it up. Loved a lot of your lines :b:
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Re: A quick 10 minute verse

Postby Edge » Sep 17th, '10, 15:43

good shit man, i like the multis and vocab and it flows smoothly
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