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La Resistance

Postby mcZu » Sep 27th, '10, 21:36

These damn days.. people seem to be enraged
But they fail to look for cover in beef like.. Lady Gaga at the VMA’s
I be the race.. that gets thrown out of a triple K club
‘bout to black out.. then rip you lame fucks
Going against me is suicide.. so step away loner
‘cause I kill you on your own shit like the Segway owner
Even with a ten day boner you couldn’t stay in line
You shouldn’t pay in lines if you don’t buy what you write
By what you write I can tell you stay bold.. and some
My lines keep people guessing like the name of that J. Cole album
I may hold anthems in the area of hood music
See my pen push a pad mos def to the area of G.O.O.D music
Drop the gangsta attitude.. you just look stupid
You better step aside.. ‘cause I wreck all lies
Real G’s tend to be silent.. like the one in recognize
I don’t get cold feet.. even if my leg on ice
A cold entrance.. I freeze vertebras.. I’m back on ice
What you lack, son might.. be the solution
To the seclusion of a rapper’s illusion.. the evolution
Must be triggered.. otherwise we’ll reside in pollution
My music caters to my emotions.. No gun stuff
You ask me what I make mood music for? Go ask Jumpoff
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Re: La Resistance

Postby Xray » Sep 27th, '10, 22:26

Nice verse with some cool punches. Flowed pretty smooth, and went together well except these lines.

To the seclusion of a rapper’s illusion.. the evolution
Must be triggered.. otherwise we’ll reside in pollution

Idk just doesn't fit imo.

Other than that, dope.
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Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


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Re: La Resistance

Postby mcZu » Sep 28th, '10, 18:46

Thanks for the feed and comments guys, appreciate it. X, the beat changes a bit around there, it flowed to me. Will see if it does flow proper if I record it, yes, if.
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Re: La Resistance

Postby mcZu » Sep 28th, '10, 19:40

A lot of people have used that ''kill you on your own shit..'' line. True, Budden is a huge influence, but the flow is different. Thanks for the feed, appreciate it.
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