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Emo Prick (1st verse I'v wrote in forever...)

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Emo Prick (1st verse I'v wrote in forever...)

Postby DƎRDYPK » Sep 30th, '10, 14:18

not my best
easily one of my worst
but that's what I can expect after staying up all night
then wanting to write a a verse to vent outta nowhere
I used to be happy guy...nothing could depress me
but then came the day where you gave up & left me...
now I sit here empty...thinking what to do next?
nothing...I give up...I feel like I'v been suplexed
off the top of the world...now i'm back at the bottom
Mike keeps moving though...nothing's gonna stop him
I'll put up a fight before I'm rotten in a coffin
but my life's like a closed casket son...I'm boxed in
I have too much free time...there's too much me time
no shoulders to cry on...no one to say "i'll be fine"
nothing's gonna be fine...everything changes
you grow up & move on...friends become strangers
2010...another year down the shitter
catch me bitching & whining about it all over Twitter
that's just me though...another fucking emo prick
but maybe one day i'll be your fucking hero kid
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Re: Emo Prick (1st verse I'v wrote in forever...)

Postby classthe_king » Sep 30th, '10, 22:44

I liked it.
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Re: Emo Prick (1st verse I'v wrote in forever...)

Postby gutawafang » Oct 1st, '10, 02:18

Flow is good homie. :y:
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Re: Emo Prick (1st verse I'v wrote in forever...)

Postby Rollimeo » Oct 1st, '10, 03:57

that was great





p.s you're all ready my hero :flower:
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Re: Emo Prick (1st verse I'v wrote in forever...)

Postby Solace » Oct 1st, '10, 12:45

I have too much free time...there's too much me time
no shoulders to cry on...no one to say "i'll be fine"
nothing's gonna be fine...everything changes
you grow up & move on...friends become strangers


:'(

Pretty good piece...Even though rhymes lacked, content made up for it.
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