I'm a captain now

[Rain Matrix]

I'm a Captain Now, with plenty left to Rap About
even if I get sick and my world is Crashing Down

like a Battered House, I have finally Caved In
these actions May Bring Amazing and Great Things

but my heart will still be mostly Vacant, Aching
and full of erratic Palpitations, I might be beyond Saving

what a hell of a Statement, hell must be Waiting
on every demon and Satan to start Blazing my Baked Skin

I know what I'm Facing but I won't be Overtaken by the Blades Sting
it's like a Knife in my Spine even as I'm Writing these Rhymes

it's almost if my Life was Designed to be Typed into Lines
and when a Mic is Combined, it's Dynamite in your Mind

sure to test the Limits of your Brains, every Minute is Insane
it's sick like the saw movies but there's no Finishing this Game

there is no Mimicking the Pain, the Hurts too Deep
so prepare to be trapped and tortured Eternally

[Steve Spag]

Now THAT'S the Rain Matrix I remember! Holy shit that was nice. The rhyme-scheme was great, you structured it very nicely, and your vocab. was on-point as usual. I love your poetic style and how it flows soo beautifully, I can already hear it on beat, haha.

Great drop man, keep it up!

[Rain Matrix]

thanks man, I'm trying to elevate my stuff

[Ka0t1c]

well you've done one hell of a job on this piece, for real

[Mr. Chambers]

link of feedback please

[Steve Spag]

^^
Created 09/11.