I Am The Maniac (PK's version)

[DƎRDYPK]

Rewrite of the new Kid Cudi & Cage collab
made into some mad PK I'm the emo maniac gangster shit

Paint the black hole...blacker
Paint the black hole...blacker
Paint the black hole...blacker
Paint the black hole...blacker

I am the maniac...the so called "bad guy"
I sit alone inside my room & get my cat high
do I believe in love? at a few points I used to...
now kids watch me more than the videos on youtube
but that don't make up for the girl that got away...
we used to be close friends...but shit's so different now a days...
if I could turn back time...me & her would be closer
today it's like we stranger's & I hardly even know her
I feel emotionless...but I don't how to feel
you taught how to separate the fake from real
my so called homie's have been acting like fake friends
I don't know why...but i'm starting to HATE THEM
I still trust you though...I see you in my nightmares
where I try & search for love but hate is right there
it's always watching me...it always follows me
I try erasing the pain with pipes & bottles see...I'mma

Paint the black hole...blacker
Paint the black hole...blacker
Paint the black hole...blacker
Paint the black hole...blacker

I am the maniac...another lost soul
I'm Jesus Christ when he was stuck up on the cross yo...
I am the maniac...the king without a queen
I am the monster that you see in your dreams...
I am the maniac...I'm the most lonely one
I'm the heartbroken freak with no homies son...
most the people I connect with I haven't even met yet
I am the maniac...the white trash emo redneck...
you wanna save me? I can't even save myself...
you say you hate me? good for you I also hate myself
but other times I fucking love myself to death
get an ego boost plus 1 everytime they say I'm "fresh"
who are they? anyone who dares to listen to...
the motherfucker named PK he's not the one to listen to...
that's what they say but do their words really matter?
I'm the artist writing a life story chapter by chapter...Imma


Paint the black hole...blacker
Paint the black hole...blacker
Paint the black hole...blacker
Paint the black hole...blacker


you wanna save me? I can't even save myself...
you say you hate me? good for you I also hate myself
you wanna save me? I can't even save myself...
you say you hate me? good for you I also hate myself

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[Solace]

I'm gunna be blunt here...It was okay, but nothing special. A great beat to do a remix over or something. But your verses were just okay, I didnt really hate them but I didnt love them. Like to me there's not a quote worthy line it that..I know you can do better dude. I didnt like how your lines were 2-3 syllable rhymes max, and not even all of them were 2 syllables max. And the flow was nothing special.
This would be a different story recorded though, but as of now just text doesn't cut it.

/realfeed

[DƎRDYPK]

I'm gunna be blunt here...It was okay, but nothing special. A great beat to do a remix over or something. But your verses were just okay, I didnt really hate them but I didnt love them. Like to me there's not a quote worthy line it that..I know you can do better dude. I didnt like how your lines were 2-3 syllable rhymes max, and not even all of them were 2 syllables max. And the flow was nothing special.
This would be a different story recorded though, but as of now just text doesn't cut it.

/realfeed

lol thanks for the feed
I'm happy that your being real on how you feel about it
I'll try harder next time
thanks for the read though bro...I truly appreciate it

I gotta stop doing drugs & writing emo shit

[Solace]

Emo>Brag tracks anyday though. Actually, this is pretty quote worthy after a second read though

do I believe in love? at a few points I used to...

But the rest of what I say still stands. I'mma also do a verse to the beat, it's bonkers lol. Keep at it.

[DƎRDYPK]

yeah lol
I tried to put brag swag rap & emo together for this...
would of been better if I kept it emo...

I'mma also do a verse to the beat,

I'll be waiting to read it
but mad props on the honest feedback...

[Devil'sAdvocate]

it was ok

[classthe_king]

Dude, I really liked this. I think it would sound great recorded. You had so many quotable lines in this. Two of my favorite were

my so called homie's have been acting like fake friends
I don't know why...but i'm starting to HATE THEM


you wanna save me? I can't even save myself...
you say you hate me? good for you I also hate myself

I haven't heard the original song so I don't know if that chorus is in it but if you wrote that yourself I really liked that too, simple yet effective. If you recorded this I think it could be a dope ass song.

[ilovebender.com]

reminded me of Rage Against the Machine, cool stiill, was great.