the only part i didn't really like was the flow slipped up @ some parts
but adding or removing words would of helped like i would of put
- wrote:
You trying to ween me off of my infinite wisdom,
like when a bitch bleeds and gets all the anger out her system,
My minds trapped in a prison,
I shackled it myself after horrific visions,
Such a terrific decision, free from the imagary given of,
Lacerated victims in my dreams as they scream for resistance,
They look up in the distance, the sky breathes fire,
meteor showers collide untill everything around them has died
They try to survive but they'll never escape,
before they get wiped out, well thats when i awake
but as you can tell I only changed up a tad bit
but besides that I see room for improvement LilSteve
