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Re: New Verse

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Oct 15th, '10, 17:32

good verse :y:
The devil ain't on a level same as him!
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Re: New Verse

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 15th, '10, 21:52

I can spit double time :D I liked it man. That dot dot dollar sign line in the beginning was one of my favorites. I love the emotion in it ya know. Its nice to see writers who normally do more horrorcore/punchline stuff go to the basics of writing a more poetic style/ It's always good to see the real side of people. Great man for real. Keep that head up homie
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: New Verse

Postby DƎRDYPK » Oct 15th, '10, 22:21

pretty cool rhymes you got there
it'd sound sexy with your accent :sweating:
keep the flows coming :flower:
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Re: New Verse

Postby MakaveliTheDon » Oct 16th, '10, 04:15

This is so beautiful. I also liked that you swagger jacked my fast flows :shifty:...lol jk

It's good you're going for a double time flow, I would love to hear it recorded. Fast flow + emotional = great most of the time.

Structure was kinda weird but I assume their part of the flow.

Keep at it Lil Steve :y:
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Far, far away from here (and nothin' I can do about it)
Everything I love go away from here (I'm wishin I could do without it)
Far, far away from here (and nothin' I can do about it)
Everything I love go away from here (I'm wishin I could do without it)


- Far Away, Tech N9ne And Krizz Kaliko
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