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bumps, scrapes and scars

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bumps, scrapes and scars

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 27th, '10, 23:45

who knows their fate, well i don't
i just wanna make my own way

can you relate cuz i can't wait
to create my home out of a great mindstate

even tho i had mistakes, i've grown from those
i'd hate to be late for what i chose when i exited the gate

and entered front stage cuz to my soul i answer always
and who do you pay, Heaven or Hell your toll

tell me you aint ready to go to the devil's hole
which place you dwell is destined to show you inner shell

are you gonna test it or stay sane, it's really your call
but life won't play safe, they'll aim at your balls

don't remain ashamed of the man you are
you're still the same, with bumps, scrapes and scars

and they just may throw stones at your walls
remain on guard, don't allow em to dictate your down fall

keep openin doors

http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=100559&start=15
Last edited by Ka0t1c on Oct 28th, '10, 20:48, edited 1 time in total.
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: bumps, scrapes and scars

Postby Just Silver » Oct 28th, '10, 00:38

seems like you stressed some lines idk it might be just me.
Overall short and sweet
7.5/10
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liked this-- "and who do you pay, Heaven or Hell your toll
tell me you aint ready to go to the devil's hole"
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Re: bumps, scrapes and scars

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 28th, '10, 20:40

thanx man, i was just tryna keep it easy
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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