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Re: Fast Verse I did

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 22nd, '10, 14:27

haha that was nice
i like how the rhymes were simple but they kept the flow constant!
Best part was that you kept to a topic, which is pretty important in any verse
keep it up brotha!
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So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: Fast Verse I did

Postby MikeNUFC » Nov 22nd, '10, 18:18

Good content, flow felt kind of messy at times.

as long as it's pure not aimed for faim n wealth


That seemed a bit cliche and the last rhyme was kinda forced

Overall it was okay, though.
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