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[mcZu]

If this was a freestyle, it would've been dope. Your concepts weren't that bad, just poorly executed. Try to implement more recent things that happened, or just certain things that took place, like events, or w.e in your wordplay. What I do when I construct a punch is, I take something that happened, that a majority of the people know of, and turn it into a punch. You can use sports metaphors, movie metaphors, TV Show metaphors, cartoon metaphors, music business metaphors.. Or just the old good word metaphors punches. You can even have more than a double entendre..

Example:
''You'll be So Far Gone like Drake moving.'' - Zu

So Far Gone is a Drake mixtape
So Far can be pronounce as So Fa, which is a Sofa.. So the sofa gone, like Drake moving..

[WakeUpShow]

If this was a freestyle, it would've been dope. Your concepts weren't that bad, just poorly executed. Try to implement more recent things that happened, or just certain things that took place, like events, or w.e in your wordplay. What I do when I construct a punch is, I take something that happened, that a majority of the people know of, and turn it into a punch. You can use sports metaphors, movie metaphors, TV Show metaphors, cartoon metaphors, music business metaphors.. Or just the old good word metaphors punches. You can even have more than a double entendre..

Example:
''You'll be So Far Gone like Drake moving.'' - Zu

So Far Gone is a Drake mixtape
So Far can be pronounce as So Fa, which is a Sofa.. So the sofa gone, like Drake moving..

again thanks alot, i'll work on it