Fa-Q - I Hear Them Calling feat. Yahhah

[dR3]

Unless you were referring to his motion theory?

[Fa-Q]

Aristotle was a philosopher
Why would you think he flew

I got a little mixed up

[Block]

you meant Icarus. I used him in my last song.

[classthe_king]

you meant Icarus. I used him in my last song.

Too late

[Yah-hah]

Hahahahaha couldnt just let him off the hook. We went to a private school what do we know

[Fa-Q]

Hahahahaha couldnt just let him off the hook. We went to a private school what do we know

I know a shit load about Jesus

[Yah-hah]

Ya me too

[Audi]

(YahHah)
I feel feeble and broken,
I'm a zombie that's evil and hopeless,
People keep chokin cause I'm lethal with no skin,
Reaper's still needing a rope then my body's seen decomposin,

Rhyme driven, a bit nonsensical.

My body knee-deep in rose stems to see how this pyro's gifted,
My addictions get mixed in with these hieroglyphics,
My head's heavy like wearin a fine-stone fitted,
They bought me a cheap casket so my spine won't fit in,

Didn't get the first line, like the last line. Made up for it.

My rhymes won't fit aswell my lines have trippled sales,
The sick shit I spit'll make your spine brittle, frail,
My missles' shell flies and whistles well,
Blind crippled hell they can find sickle cell in your minds rippled shell,

I'm just not feelin the content. Repetition of shell and spine isn't doing too well either.

I have a quarterbacks courage and this interception hurts,
Complete fire I'ma 60 second Smith and Wesson burst,
I run forever to the end of Earth until my tube socks break,
I live a boondock saint destined to feel Tupac's fate,

Last line was probably my favorite of your verse.

DO NOT WAIT, get caught relaxin when the whistle blows,
Ribs crack and snap from the impact of the initail blow,

Alright. Decent imagery.

(Fa-Q)
I’m always in rare form, you see that term’s good,
Until the world all dies from worm wood,
Until the shock waves wear off and we all have to battle God,
And he’s armed to the teeth, and all we have is a cattle prod,

Second line was weak, last two were nice.

And diehard fans await a return, their ready to clap,
With slander a snare, I cant handle their stair, they’re steady to trap,
I’m trapped in this obstacle course snare, with long horse hair,
Under the sun’s watch, I feel that’s not just a forced stare,

Repetition of snare is bad. I didn't like these 4.

So I’ll fly with Aristotle’s flight, I now have wax wings,
The sky’s broken, and each of the crack’s sings,
Plus I’m out of lessons, I’m more than just adolescent,
I’m riding the apocalyptic horses, just on my saddle restin’

Fly and flight repetition is ugly. Second line is beautiful. Third line doesn't tie into the fourth.

Each hoof has mushroom clouds, I’m on the lost ride,
I must be seeing Christ, because I’m found cross eyed,
So while I swim laps in the lakes of fire, I’ll find what makes a liar,
So now I no longer have a fear of falling, I hear them calling,

Second line could be done better but great idea. Last two were a great closer.

Overall: Lot of potential but too much filler. Both had strong rhymes and both had the same short comings. Bad repetition and loose train of thought through out the verses. Alright peace. Keep it up.

[Fa-Q]

Thanks Audi....very...in dept0h..thanks for the feed

[Yah-hah]

Ya idk if you've ever read anything else from us but this is definitly one of our more multi rhyme based pieces rather than in depth message or meaning. But appreciate the good feed