The Skill of Blood

[Pauly D]

I write on this paper, to get shit out of me
the vapors seep through my bone, like violent sodomy
I touch this inkless pen, write and thoughtless thoughts spew out instead
I laid your precious verse down, and tucked it in it's bed
lyrics sound as if they're dead, but the writers' imagination
are falsely glowing in their head, like radioactive brain stimulation
perhaps that didn't flow the way you wanted it
so how 'bout you write it off, and cheaply audit it
techinically you couldn't understand half the shit that's written
so why doesn't everybody write backwards, for the sake of bein' misriddin'
there goes the flow again, in case you're stll readin'
the ink is turnin' red(read), as if it started bleedin'

If it wasn't for the 20 post thing, you'd see my feedback. But yeah here's the link
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[Pauly D]

Bump..

[Just Silver]

not bad especially at a double digit poster

liked the rhymes had decent structure and flowed pretty nice

[Pauly D]

thanks i appreciate it

[Sam.]

I liked the rhymes but could not flow that easily , duuno why ! but that's nothing compared to the way it was structured .

[Pauly D]

I liked the rhymes but could not flow that easily , duuno why ! but that's nothing compared to the way it was structured .

The way I say it can flow pretty good, but like it said in the verse, "It might not flow the way you wanted it"

thanks tho