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Postby DƎRDYPK » Feb 7th, '11, 05:53

link of linkback: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=107390

PS: I wrote this last night blitzed outta my mind with no beat
if the flows a little shakey somewhere that's why :sweating:



I'v been feeling nothing ever since that bitch left me...
I dunno but it sucks & I'v been saying i'm ready...
to die...but I can go out like that instead I cry
thinking about what could of been inside of my bed where I lie
watching some tv...trying to take it easy
but I don't know what to do...why would the bitch leave me?
I know why...it's cause I'm a lazy ass good for nothing who been crazy
& just because I'm white & my spit sick don't call me "Slim Shady"
that's what's drives me nuts...naww it drives me pussy lips
you think you know me? you say you know me? you never knew me bitch
why the fuck am I sitting awake? it's almost midnight...
it's time to write a song, light a bong that's the way to live live
take my hand & I can bring you to life's playground
you think your friends will leave you? well mike will stays around
I'll be here forever baby...untill somebody whipes me out
even when I write at night...best believe the light is out....



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Re: faggots...don't read this...

Postby Sam. » Feb 7th, '11, 11:19

Nice continuation . :y:
link of feed bra . :unsure:
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Re: don't read this...faggots...>.>

Postby mdemaz » Feb 9th, '11, 05:35

I couldn't help reading.
It's good.
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Re: don't read this...faggots...>.>

Postby RainMan44 » Feb 10th, '11, 05:17

It's good, but you can change this line in order to make it a multi-syllablle rhyme

"Why the fuck am I sitting awake? it's almost midnight...
it's time to write a song, light a bong that's the way to live the life"

Change "live the life" to "live life"...so it can rhyme better with "midnight"!

Live life/midnight :y:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: don't read this...faggots...>.>

Postby DƎRDYPK » Feb 10th, '11, 05:22

RainMan44 wrote:It's good, but you can change this line in order to make it a multi-syllablle rhyme

"Why the fuck am I sitting awake? it's almost midnight...
it's time to write a song, light a bong that's the way to live the life"

Change "live the life" to "live life"...so it can rhyme better with "midnight"!

Live life/midnight :y:


haha thanks for catching that :sweating:
didn't see that when I finished typing it

thanks for the peeps on the new drops everybody :y:
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Re: don't read this...faggots...>.>

Postby RainMan44 » Feb 10th, '11, 05:27

DƎRDYPK wrote:
RainMan44 wrote:It's good, but you can change this line in order to make it a multi-syllablle rhyme

"Why the fuck am I sitting awake? it's almost midnight...
it's time to write a song, light a bong that's the way to live the life"

Change "live the life" to "live life"...so it can rhyme better with "midnight"!

Live life/midnight :y:


haha thanks for catching that :sweating:
didn't see that when I finished typing it

thanks for the peeps on the new drops everybody :y:


You're welcome ;)
Can you leave some feedback on mine, please?

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=107874
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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