Unfinished verse. "new canvas"

[Block]

This is probably the first unfinished verse I've put here. But I'm cleaning my phone, and since I don't have apc at the moment, I don't want to lose this verse lol. You can feed it if you'd like. Alot of the flow is probably off because it's far from finished.

You set the tone and we were off to a bad start,
Severed every bone in our arms so that we could hide the track marks
That star resembles a new height you'll never reach..
A new fight for a breath in a life you'll never see, (let it be)
Let it hang in a designated blind spot...
You are living in a prison that is built upon what I've got,
And I've got a vision of your own dreams,
Sew seams together outta dignity (with no need for sympathy)..
Or to ever separate the hope that you had given me
Hoping the vacinity would separate itself...
A tear in the fabric of this desecrated hell...
Sew it back together, we could never blame ourselves..
See... I'm happy, can't we all fake a smile?
Make a pile on the floor that consists of scattered thoughts,
After all is said & done, mix it with the setting sun,
Insist that it is art and it's directed toward anyone
(who will listen to it after dark).. After dark..
This is me after all.. An after thought of "once was"..
Standing tall, come up short, pass it off as dumb luck..
Some schmuck will come into the picture when I'm gone...
Carrying his paints, he will erase me from the drawing...
But I'll remain a sketch upon the edges of your mind,
I'm a simple little thought from a simple little time...





I fed a few pieces. Sorry it's really hard to grab links.

[RainMan44]

I liked it. A lot.
I think you didn't sacrifice substance for multies, which is very good.

Good job

[Block]

Thanks man.