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My Eminem Diss

Postby FreeSpeech » Apr 23rd, '11, 20:29

Nah, but you wouldn't have clicked if it didn't say that...
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^feedback I gave...

This is madness, you got shit locked, I come and unlatch it
Come with a hatchet, smash the lock, get what I want when I grab it
I’m taking the game, insane when I’m taping your drapes
Shut, I’m closing your curtains, end of story I’m shaving your mane
No more lion (lying), you ain’t half as ill as you claim
I’m killing ‘em mayne, sure thing, put a mil on my name
Place your bets, Russian roulette when I’m rushing your set
Crushing your rep, catch your girls eye and bust in the net
Don’t fuck with me or next I’ll get blood on my checks
My Nikes are white but talk shit they’ll be red in a sec
I drop a verse and it hits, it’s coma to stretcher
So don’t be tripping like a Muslim going to Mecca
I’m owning the sector, you just a clone I’m boning your records
Yeah fuck your CD’s, see me you’ll go home in a second
No curveballs, I’m just throwing heat that’s gashing your chin
I was smashing rims way back when shooting baskets in gym
I’m ill and I’m cashing in
Whack Hiphop Ink Producer, I’m smashing whips like crashing a Benz
Reread my last line please
But be prepared, have some smelling salts and IV’s
I belt assaults when I’m gelling and I fry beats
Check your eyepiece, you can’t see me when my lines freak

Opinions? It's not meant to be deep or anything...
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Re: My Eminem Diss

Postby Sam. » Apr 23rd, '11, 20:30

link of feed
read the rules
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Re: My Eminem Diss

Postby FreeSpeech » Apr 23rd, '11, 20:32

MCSam wrote:link of feed
read the rules

I'll add it...
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Re: My Eminem Diss

Postby Johnny Quid » Apr 23rd, '11, 21:38

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Re: My Eminem Diss

Postby Maybe » Apr 23rd, '11, 21:42

It was good, but it flowed exactly like a song on Recovery. I mean, I even heard it in Eminems voice when I read it. I don't know if that was on purpose or not, but it added insult to injury---since your rhymes were better than his were on Recovery.

Overall, 10/10 from a fun diss standpoint.
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Re: My Eminem Diss

Postby FreeSpeech » Apr 23rd, '11, 21:47

Maybe wrote:It was good, but it flowed exactly like a song on Recovery. I mean, I even heard it in Eminems voice when I read it. I don't know if that was on purpose or not, but it added insult to injury---since your rhymes were better than his were on Recovery.

Overall, 10/10 from a fun diss standpoint.

Thanks dude :smoking:

This wasn't a diss to Em though, I just put that in the title for views :D
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Re: My Eminem Diss

Postby Maybe » Apr 23rd, '11, 21:53

FreeSpeech wrote:
Maybe wrote:It was good, but it flowed exactly like a song on Recovery. I mean, I even heard it in Eminems voice when I read it. I don't know if that was on purpose or not, but it added insult to injury---since your rhymes were better than his were on Recovery.

Overall, 10/10 from a fun diss standpoint.

Thanks dude :smoking:

This wasn't a diss to Em though, I just put that in the title for views :D


Oh, I know. I got that while reading it; it's just funny to take somebodies flow and make it better.
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