Enjoyment Goes On (EGO) (16 Lines/Verse)

[M15HKA]

got your hopes up that this is a feed didn't I?

[M15HKA]

I think it is ok bro, like it feels you are just going in circles. I prefer your other writings to be honest. I can't remember but you had a battle with someone and had some really funny lines. Can't remember with who though? It was like a tie and you needed someone to vote to decide it and I didn't vote

Keep working at it though On the right track bro.

[VenomBlackViper]

I'ma be honest here bruh I wasn't really feeling this. The piece was trying to come off as crazy but the lines didn't make any sense instead of being ass backwards twisted humor like you were going for. Also the rhyming was pretty forced aswell. My advice would be to work on your rhyming first since I've seen your concepts & most of them are pretty good, don't use forced rhymes but take your time & develop good rhyme schemes. When going for a crazy type track you always want to be clever instead of just saying random things for the fuck of it like you did here, i've seen instances of you being clever before so I know you can.
Keep up writing though & you should get better at it.