Keystyle

[mcZu]

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I'm just gonna write what comes to my mind in the next 7 min. I'll be vibing to a Just Blaze instrumental called Come On Baby in the process. I apologize for any typos up front, because I'll be typing as fast as I'll be thinking. I'll try to edit it when I'm done. So bear with me.

Come on baby, come on bay, come on baby
Come on baby, let's just sing, like hell... no sequel
Writing to me is a precious thing, whether it being big, black, white or ugly like smeagle
Bars is what I'll be investing in, whether the wordplay ends up being feeble
I feel like it's feasible to do this without disturbing the peace
Even if it's ludacris, this curse in this piece is a verse liable to the thirst in seas
Whether I'm the first, second or the third to be deep
I'll be the one to leap in years ahead of time
I'm fed up with mine, I mean, I'm fed up with mines
'cause my sentence is a pyro maniac without the coal in line
My goal aligned to the way your speak to me
'cause everything you say is just a bleep to me
You're just a creep to me, and you're girl is just a freak to me
And she creeps to me, I'm a maverick, so no use pointing the heat to me
I walk all over you, the only way you'll ever be street to me
I rap like big, pac, pun, and guru read to me
And you just rap like timmy.. from southpark, I'm slaughterhouse parked
In a fast lane just before I start the car and drive over the constitution
'cause I'm above the law, while my bars blow you a kiss, no prostitution
And you can just fall flat and give up, this shit stuck, so sit, fuck
Before I eve the side of your body cage and peroxide your heart, I mean leaving you ribbed up
Lift up, before I stick up this spliff 'cause I stick up to this J
I lit up your eye lids when I lit this lid before I smoke an L and crave a line like fast it's..
Oh, joking, I'm only playing tetris, come on baby, come on baby...

[MikeNUFC]

For a keystyle that was fucking great. Rhyming was nice and smooth with some cool lines in there. The bit where you ended with "to me" for a few bars seemed kinda lazy rhyming but nothing majorly bad, really, rappers use that all the time. Good stuff.

[Spyder]

loved the vocab in this and flowed flawlessly, need to do more work like this, but honestly havent read your stuff in a while so might be like this haha

keep it up

[mcZu]

Thanks for the feed guys.