Hells Kitchen

[Blu]

I was bathed, bred, and fed to be one of the elite
To make sure none of my rhymes ever got obsolete
While I'm grabbing you by the neck and snapping your esophagus
And stuffing you inside a dusty old sarcophagus
With your named etched on it
Using slang like it's some kind of sketched e-bonics
I came straight from Hell's Kitchen
Yeah boy, them cells better be itchin'
And down there I'm as hot as Houston Texas
Bring up the next victim, who's goin' test this?
So be careful cuz I don't spit fire, but gasoline
Burning in the pits of Hell, my ass is mean!

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I kinda rushed the ending cuz I didn't really know how to end it.

[Blu]

Thanks, I just stuck with that ending because I had no clue how else to end it.

[classthe_king]

First of all, a normal verse is 16 lines so when you just do random verses that's what you should probably do. Second, you need to write it to a beat, continually rapping to yourself over and over again over a beat will make the flow better. Your flow was pretty good in the begining but your lines were WAY too short at the end. When it comes to your lyrics, they weren't bad, but there was nothing really good about them either. For starters I would either try and incorporating some more complex rhyme schemes or some more creative topics.