Shut The Fuck Up

[WakeUpShow]

Whatever happened to emotion or some thinking
It seems like sex and booze are now the potion to a big thing
You're fucking horrid, that's why people hate your "music"
Sit in the fucking corner while the artists make the music
I ain't here to spit vicious wordplay or words the sickest nerds say
Only to stop the death of hip-hop before it's missing ear-lay
I guess trisomy 21 is a symptom of selling your soul
I guess falling off is a good excuse that you fell in his hole
Fuck Soulja Boy AND his 1st grade Vocab
Fuck the mindless fans who think his cursed based flow rad
If noticing good hip-hop makes me a hater then SWELL!
Gucci doesn't even deserve money as a waiter at Mel's
I can't resist a punchline, cause Waka is never seeing past an anus
You're the wack "stereo-type", that's the only reason that ya famous


http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=117936

[ArsheyHaq]

It was good. I'm kinda glad you moved away from the punchline style and actually have content on this one It's good to get to know the writer and his/her opinions for once, like here.

The first half I really wasn't digging that much. The mutlis weren't working for me but it picked up during the second half when you started adding specifics like name-dropping. The whole last few lines were dope:

Fuck Soulja Boy AND his 1st grade Vocab
Fuck the mindless fans who think his cursed based flow rad
If noticing good hip-hop makes me a hater then SWELL!
Gucci doesn't even deserve money as a waiter at Mel's
I can't resist a punchline, cause Waka is never seeing past an anus
You're the wack "stereo-type", that's the only reason that ya famous

I really hope you continue writing like this.

[EyeQ200]

It flowed well most of the way throughout, and had nice content..
So here's my negative feed, you rhymed 'music' with 'music' without it being a multie, that's seen as lazy, so keep it in mind for your next peice
Also, "Fuck Soulja Boy" is pretty played out, not dropping his name, but just the phrase 'fuck soulja boy', i think you could have done something a bit more clever with the lines about him, but that's it, keep at it man

[WakeUpShow]

bump*****