Living (8 Lines)

[the real slim shady]

nah im kidding, i read it.
Kinda weird, like all of the other ones you have done that i have read (thats 2...) but weird is good..

So i'm sinking for this "showty" while I ask myself how and why

spelling mistake? im not sure, and im probably wrong so imma look like a right douche but i thought i'd point it out

I like it. Interesting concept and I liked the flow a lot. You had a good string of multies going right off the bat. Keep that up throughout the verse, helps the flow.

i never do posts this long... first time for everything though.

[Sam.]

I never meant to give you this amount of my attention
Until you mounted my erection and now i'm doubting you while restless
Cause you switched from chess to checkers and now i'm pistol-whipping chairs
Wrote a sixteen million record about you and how you dared
Me to leave you so honestly, you knew I wouldn't think about it
Keeping that in mind you used your highly fine behind to get me shouting
So i'm sinking for this "showty" while I ask myself how and why
How could this bitch still be living inside me after four months that she died ?

attention-restless dont rhyme
good one tho ,liked the last 4 lines only man the rest was not that good and the last line was amazing dude ,keep writing .

[Sam.]

word, it ain't a "full rhyme" like they say it's a near-rhyme cuz tension rhymes with restless so the "a" is outta the mix, I wasn't sure on putting it there but i couldnt reakky think of anything else

thanks for the feedback bruh, i appreciate it !

but when i tried to flow i could not do it ,it's really difficult to bend those words but yeah depends whether you can bend it with your accent .