races. we ain't

[M&M59]

first of all this is not a shot at anybody, im just feeling guilty for the things white people did back then.

second.
this is my first rap i finished writing ever on english, so don't go to hard on me.


it's supposed to be rapped over this beat
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zd_hbezTMHk

we made a image we created/
a dream i had in my head and i faced it/
got in laid taped and raped it/
it seemed like i should put it out on the net and be patient/
it felt completed and ready to be rated/
but the way it was treated and debated i felt hated/
i diden't think it was needed to say this but rap supposed to have many faces and draw many races/
and it's just the case that if i'm white people won't buy it and i just have to face it/
and even tho its bumbing and the adrealine is pumping you still being racist/
but every people do dumb things and we just get our own medicine back in our faces/

[BigBoss]

i liked it

[M&M59]

i liked it

thanks man, means alot

i know it ain't nothing speacial, but im just trying to improve.

[Sam.]

that was awesome man good shit there nice flow even tho the structure went hay wire but hell it was okay but the only thinh that i hated was too much rhyming with the word "face" .

keep at it .

[M&M59]

that was awesome man good shit there nice flow even tho the structure went hay wire but hell it was okay but the only thinh that i hated was too much rhyming with the word "face" .

keep at it .

thanks for the feedback.

[Suicide]

Good concept. Structure was haywire, but that don't really many anything in these text raps. Could be a good ass song if you added more and a chorus.

But, you did good.