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Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

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Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

Postby J.R. » Aug 5th, '11, 20:26

Link of feed:
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=120949&p=1714955#p1714955

Beat:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0rgPKPSZ62A


(Intro)
1,000's of years ago..Jesus died for our sins,
Now here he lay on my necklace,
As I pray to be born again..

(Verse 1)
I usually don't pray, only when abandoned,
I've been branded, stranded, and auctioned,
Pissed off, lonely, proceed with caution,
Behind the curtain, I am not the man you see,
Blinded by hurtin, I am not who you wanna be,
And if you don't believe , I'm gonna make you see,
I feel like I spit awful, maybe this game ain't my cup of tea..


[Chorus - Geno]
On my journey I'm a lost soul, abstracted like Picasso,
My passion attracts the sadness like magic to the crossroad,
Where I'm handed second chances to man up and reach all goals,
Plans are ever standing as I hang faith up on the cross so..
x2

[Verse 2]
My desire to get rich, overwhelms my religion,
I gamble on shit, B, why can't you quit bidding?
Catching shit from my family, I can't breathe!
Wreckin my life, wishin I could just leave,
My hair looks awful, wish I wasn't livin, no fans for me,
Hey there B, why can't you quit hittin the bottle? No Sanity,
God please answer I'm sitting here askin, what is your plan for me?

[Chorus - Geno]
On my journey I'm a lost soul, abstracted like Picasso,
My passion attracts the sadness like magic to the crossroad,
Where I'm handed second chances to man up and reach all goals,
Plans are ever standing as I hang faith up on the cross so..
x2
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Re: Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

Postby J.R. » Aug 5th, '11, 21:19

Geno wrote:Oh damn it dropped.

Btw post the beat. :smoking:

Posted,

Yeah, I only announce this shit in my thread :p
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Re: Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

Postby J.R. » Aug 5th, '11, 21:28

Geno wrote:This is the first time I've seen your verses for this. I think you did good. :y:

I don't know if you planned this, but for this line:

I feel like I spit awful, maybe this game ain't my cup of tea..

I get the image of someone spitting out an "awful" cup of tea. :laughing:

That works great imo.

That line, I reworked it so many times and was hoping someone would get it. It was a joke, lmao. :laughing:
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Re: Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

Postby BumShiv » Aug 5th, '11, 23:40

this shit is sick bro(s) . The first 3 lines really got me into it. Just wish it was longer !! :D And the first verse is a lot better now that Geno pointed out the cup of tea line :y: Great hook Geno :y: Overall, goodshit.

Please feed this :y:

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Re: Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

Postby WakeUpShow » Aug 6th, '11, 00:00

[quote="BShady14"]
1,000 years ago..Jesus died for our sins,
lmao some Christian
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Re: Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

Postby J.R. » Aug 6th, '11, 01:18

Cosh wrote:
BShady14 wrote:1,000 years ago..Jesus died for our sins,
lmao some Christian



Lmao, it was made like that to rhyme better, and it's a type-o. "1000's of years ago" is what it's suppose to say. and you can't just post that, it requires proper feed, but don't even fix it. Just shut the fuck up and get the fuck out.

lmao some smartass.
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Re: Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

Postby Alex2012 » Aug 6th, '11, 01:34

I had a little difficulty with the beat but it is certainly due to my bad pronunciation.
I like the story, it would be interesting to see a sequel, good metaphors,
nice intro and great chorus. :y:
I'm out of the matrix and I improved my music taste here, I opened my eyes and discovered so different ways to see the world, thanks to you all!

That started here:
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That will end here:
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Re: Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

Postby Emadyville » Aug 6th, '11, 22:23

I liked the verses tho they were really short, I didnt check the beat but the flow seemed good for the verses and hook.

I liked that cup of tea line like geno pointed out, and the hook was cool, I loved that picasso/crossroads rhyme.

Good job guys :y:
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Re: Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

Postby J.R. » Aug 7th, '11, 00:08

Menzo wrote:I agree with Emady in regards to the length of the verses, but they seemed to flow nicely from what they were :y:

As for the beat.......................... :worship:

The first Hip-Hop song (if you will) I ever heard was Gangsta's Paradise...wow :flutter: :wub:

Thanks, and yeah same here actually. :flutter: :wub:
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Re: Track 6~ On the cross Ft. Geno

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 7th, '11, 03:38

overall great message, definitely headin the right direction with this, not much to say that hasnt already been said, good job you guys
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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