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Xanax pills

Postby SeriallyIller » Aug 9th, '11, 10:07

I wrote this awhile back,actually it was a verse of a song i wrote,but it didn't came out good except for the verse i'm about to share.

We reached home and started to make out,
It was my night without
any doubt,
She laid on the bed,time to seal the deal,
Spread her legs,in horror i scream(ed),
'oh shit,is that jack and jill on the same hill'
'or an illusion caused by em xanax pills'
She said 'to be honest,i'm a she-male'
Hearing that,i started to run like hell,
Didn't notice the wall ahead,crashed into it and fell,
She jumped on me and said 'it's a secret,you can never tell'
So i'm setting you on fire like my last bf Nel,
I couldn't keep my senses,passed out,dont know for long,
When i regained it,she was long gone,
'Holy shit!was that real
or am i hallucinating'
Till this day,i keep on debating.

Feed:
/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=121639 debating.

Feed:
forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=121639tting you on fire like my last bf Nel,
I couldn't keep my senses,passed out,dont know for long,
When i regained it,she was long gone,
'Holy shit!was that real
or am i hallucinating'
Till this day,i keep on debating.


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Re: Xanax pills

Postby J.R. » Aug 10th, '11, 02:43

Simplistic rhymes, awful flow, keep elevatin man.
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Re: Xanax pills

Postby SeriallyIller » Aug 10th, '11, 04:35

BShady14 wrote:Simplistic rhymes, awful flow, keep elevatin man.
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Re: Xanax pills

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 10th, '11, 06:11

i hope it wasn't real could of slipped u a rufee and raped you :o oh, it wasn't something i'd wanna brag about, it's a crazy story :laughing:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Xanax pills

Postby VenomBlackViper » Aug 11th, '11, 01:54

Your delivery sucked.
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Postby Sam. » Aug 11th, '11, 12:37

Blehh ! shitty concept there man not at all funny but aroused interest :shifty: till the verse hit the 8th line ,try a diff concept man and add some multis to your shit .
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