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Postby WakeUpShow » Aug 13th, '11, 02:16

fuck wasn't supposed to post that
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Re: final verse 4hm

Postby BumShiv » Aug 13th, '11, 07:46

damn bro YOU KILLED IT :worship: my favorite parts =
If I see the face of death, I'll punch it in it's jaws of life
March against violence, but make sure to pause and fight

Hell is open, Heaven's locked. Hellish omens, Seven flocks.


cant really criticize it bc in my opinion its perfect :D and im not a rapper so i might not find those little things. But in my opinion, SWAG :worship: lol

Please check out this beat and try to feed it :y:
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Re: final verse 4hm

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Aug 13th, '11, 08:37

I felt it was great, but I'd say tweak it a bit. Got damn at your vocabulary though! Keep it up! :y:
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Usernamesarehard wrote:My dick is going in your mouth whether you like it or not bipolar fuck boy.

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Re: .......don't open this thread

Postby WakeUpShow » Aug 13th, '11, 14:00

thanks alot guys, but I posted that by accident :sweating:
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